The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Widely, there are two kinds of leadership: competitive way and cooperative way. Between these two ways of leadership, I agree with the suggested claim that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Granted, in order to improve one's ability in specific field, competition can be one of the best choice for that objective. Since every people have known about that, that's why traditionally people evaluate the students by examination in school. It is efficient in past times, which the leader do not have to know about diverse things. Thus, it is possible that the leader instilled by competition may become a good leader in past.
However, when it comes to leader for present days, they need to work with the people with various majors. This brings the result that people cannot have sufficient ability only by competition. In order to be a successful leader, CEO only need to know about the business, not about the technology in past. However, nowadays, to be a good leader, the background in other majors should be followed. Let me introduce the example of Steve Jobs, the formal CEO of Apple. Because he have sufficient background in not only business but also design and technology, Apple can be one of the most successful, leading-edge company. Therefore, the ability of cooperation is inevitable for nowadays leader.
In addition, the people who is familiar with competition only, they even possibly be hard to cooperate with others. During long competition, people create their own strategy which effective for competition. And among that strategies, strict exclusion of cooperation is one of the most effective strategy. The new generation in South Korea and China show this aspect clearly. In order to win the other people from the strict competition, some students deliberately not deliver some important notices, for example, about assignment which may be scored, for other competitors. Since the competition is the only thing that they have learned in school, they don't know how to cooperate with people, and the people who are familiar with this strategies may not be a good leader consequently. Thus, to lead the young people in positive way, instilling them about cooperation from young age can be better way than instilling them about competition
In conclusion, it may possibly be a good leader instilled by a sense of competition in past. However, it seems obvious that the leader who know how to cooperate may be induce more positive results than the leader who only know how to compete with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...petition. Granted, in order to improve ones ability in specific field, competition ...
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Line 2, column 165, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...nce every people have known about that, thats why traditionally people evaluate the s...
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Line 2, column 421, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...by competition may become a good leader in past. However, when it comes to leader for ...
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Line 3, column 296, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
... the business, not about the technology in past. However, nowadays, to be a good leader...
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Line 3, column 476, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...bs, the formal CEO of Apple. Because he have sufficient background in not only busin...
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Line 4, column 653, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... that they have learned in school, they dont know how to cooperate with people, and ...
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Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: MIGHT_PERHAPS[1]
Message: Use simply 'may', 'possibly'.
Suggestion: may; possibly
...em about competition In conclusion, it may possibly be a good leader instilled by a sense o...
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Line 5, column 19, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'may'.
Suggestion: may
...em about competition In conclusion, it may possibly be a good leader instilled by a sense o...
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Line 5, column 85, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...der instilled by a sense of competition in past. However, it seems obvious that the lea...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0569476082 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82459401865 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462414578588 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4793990488 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.714285714 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25868550931 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081991096819 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947741391415 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173672462662 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131884209892 0.0667264976115 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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