The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
There is an adage that says "United we stand, Divided we fall". This bolsters the author's statement as well. It is important that the society teaches its young people to practice cooperation instead of being competitive, for them to become pioneers in any industry.
I believe that leadership comes when you cooperate and uplift the people while uplifting yourself. When a person is taught cooperation, he/she will always think about everyone who is associated with him/her and not only will focus on their personal goals but will move forward with everyone else. For instance, Mahatma Gandhi, who was a revolutionary and worked towards the eradication of racism both nationally and internationally, is known for his non-violence and cooperative methodologies. Had he not been taught cooperation in his younger years, he would not have been a freedom fighter and an influencer of his time who revoked the entire world merely by his skills as an effective orator. He came from an affluent family but for the values instilled by his parents, he did not grow up to be competitive but an affable and humble person. Therefore, it is necessary for the society that it pays attention to impregnate a sense of cooperation among its younger generation.
However, some might argue that to survive in the current world, one has to be competitive but I vehemently disagree with this statement. We are instilling an emotion of avarice and power when we educate a young person to be competitive which might only be beneficial for an individual. On the other hand, if we educate a person to be cooperative, we are growing society as a whole.
In conclusion, I would say that if we are teaching a young generation of society to be competitive, we have to make sure that they self-compete to make themself a better person every day while being cooperative with the members of the society for better upliftment and progression.
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...hem to become pioneers in any industry. I believe that leadership comes when you...
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...cooperative, we are growing society as a whole. In conclusion, I would say th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00934579439 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01230480866 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3102432741 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.692307692 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198063221917 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760161816335 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634089548164 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116806445374 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198367135884 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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