The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

We live in a society where change is inevitable. This change could be both in a good and a bad way i.e it could lead to growth and have a positive effect or could have a detrimental effect in our society.Both sides of this coin are a result of cooperation and competition , it all depends on the perspective and motive of the individual which brings change.I agree with the author that in most cases it is a sense of cooperation which is the best way to prepare individuals to lead in fields of politics , business, education and many more.Albeit the author should not discard the idea of healthy competition as it could prove to be fruitful in some cases.

Firstly,in the field of politics building up a government is a team job.Although there is a single person who leads a particular government i.e the Prime Minister or President in case of some countries but still these people become who they are because of the team constantly working for them.Hence in order to develop a career in politics one should have people skills and develop a sense of co-operation instead of being a maverick and creating competition.

Secondly,in the industrial fields it is networking which helps a person to progress further in his/her domain.If a person is rude with his colleagues then this would create a sense of hostility in the work environment and others will try to bring that person down.It is always good to strive to be better than someone but in that journey one should also develop a sense of camaraderie while working with other people.For instance, if a person is rude to his colleagues and friends they will not help him when the time comes for searching a new job or making any references to find a new one.They will instead portray you in a wrong way in the minds of your future employer.Hence it is always better to be cooperative with other people for both our personal and societal gains.

However,it is not always cooperation which helps a person to grow. As their should a healthy competition instilled in people's minds otherwise they would be lackadaisical in their jobs.As in a team environment if there are no personal advantages to the job, a particular person might not perform any work as he would think that someone from his team will eventually do it, bringing down the competence of the entire team.Also the people who excel in any field are provided with more opportunities as compared to others. For instance , a student who is the best in his school generally gets the best university.Similarly a professional who is best at his job gets a promotion. Therefore in some cases it is competition which helps in development of an individual.

In this constantly changing society, it is cooperation which will help a person in the longer run.Albeit he/she should be able to distinguish between situations where competition is necessary over cooperation. Hence yound minds should be made capable enough to succeed in all situations possible , by instilling the best of both senses in them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, in most cases, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2505.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85465116279 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96964362913 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463178294574 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 785.7 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 242.861462567 60.3974514979 402% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 250.5 118.986275619 211% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.6 23.4991977007 220% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.3 5.21951772744 293% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 7.80617977528 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272757473653 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982564304797 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043295041609 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143889032536 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233757589946 0.0667264976115 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 27.2 14.1392134831 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.1743820225 181% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.74 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 11.8971910112 252% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.7820224719 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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