The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Alexander the Great once said, " I am not afraid of an army of lions lead by a sheep, I am afraid of an army of sheep lead by a lion. It has been rightly said that cooperation is the key to success. In order to make the future generation ready to take up leadership in several fields, it is necessary that a sense of cooperation and team work is instilled in them. Excessive competition has always lead to breakdown. For a society to prosper, it is necessary to lay a strong foundation of confident, cooperative and enthusiastic younger generation.
It has been rightly said that learners today, are the leaders tomorrow. People who stress on learning more than achieving have always turned about to be better leaders. For example, the billionaire Dhirubhai Ambani, the owner of Ambani Enterprise. He started very young, as an employee at a petroleum pump and worked his way up. To enlarge his business he always collaborated with businesses instead of standing against them. This not only made his company bigger but also helped the smaller enterprises to flourish. The society must always teach the younger generation by setting examples and role models who have valued learning.
It is a very popular saying, there is no I in a team. A combined effort bears the ripest fruit. Not only competition breaks down people, but it also takes aways the collaborative efforts. Collective effort leads to lesser individual work and greater results. For example, the National Freedom struggle of India. It would not have been possible to get independence only by the efforts of a few individuals. Hard-earned freedom is the result of the efforts of a large group. A team that works together, stays together. To reach the zenith in their field, it is necessary to be tolerable and cooperative of each other.
Although competition can bring out the best in a person, excess of everything has always been bad. Mental stress, office politics to name a few of the problems originating from excessive competitiveness. Companies or institutes who have centralized the power in the hands of a single individual have had a devasting fate. For example, the dictatorial government of Hitler. Hitler always wanted to have complete control of power and used regressive methods to suppress revolts. On the other hand, several colonies of British England could flourish due to control being divided among a group of people. A team working together for the larger good eventually benefits everyone.
It is important to train young people early and educate them on the importance of cooperation than competition. Everyone in the current scenario is aware of the cutthroat competition which has resulted in anxiety and depression. Instead, if the society works on building a more communal environment, it will lead to prosperity and development. In ancient times also, although the king was the highest authority in any kingdom, he had a bunch of people by his side, to correct him when he goes wrong and help him make the most difficult decision. We need to learn from our predecessors and build a more collaborative society for a larger good.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
... them. Excessive competition has always lead to breakdown. For a society to prosper,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, thus, for example, i am afraid, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2612.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98473282443 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88682872418 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55534351145 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5113867104 60.3974514979 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.1515151515 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8787878788 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 5.21951772744 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167765593222 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0375118140029 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396037550118 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0869999531104 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273742957078 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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