"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is true that the young people should be prepared for leadership because they are the future of the country, for it is them who will decide what the future is going to hold. I firmly believe that both cooperation as well competition go hand in hand to preen the individuals for leadership. While cooperation is only a group dynamic, one should be cooperative to suit everyone as a whole but competition, can also be an individual dynamic, helping in improving oneself. And yet, the most important competition of all is competing with oneself to strive for excellence.
Moreover, a sense of competition is necessary to be instilled in order to be great leaders who will not just take care of it's individuals but also work on giving the best to it's individuals. For instance, leadership in government will be required to make the nation grow economically more rapidly than other nations while the same in an industry such as software industry will be required to win the maximum customers. Hence, cooperate within your organisation but compete with others in the market to achieve the best.
A quintessential example that exudes both cooperation and competition among individuals is sports. No sports, be it basketball, football or cricket can be "won" without great leadership, cooperation as well as a desire to win giving rise to immense competition amongst the teams. The sports is the best method to develop leadership qualities amongst the individuals. It accounts for great struggle, practice, faith, tenacity as well as cooperation and competition. The competition is specifically an integral part, which is for an individual with himself/herself, within the team members during practices and amongst the contending teams on the day of the tournament.
Hence, I conclude that both cooperation and competition are necessary for an individual to grow as a leader. If it's not for competition, there's no motivation to ameliorate oneself, be it the competition with oneself or with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, still, well, while, for instance, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 325.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19076923077 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19341037489 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507692307692 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 535.5 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9800218069 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.5 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243661426254 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908071845411 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344397147439 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155833822537 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196122276331 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.