Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
"Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study." This statement contains two words of focus; interest and talent. How do we describe interest? What is talent?
Generally, it is noticed that interests change over time. Giving my personal example, I wanted to be a pilot in junior school because that's when I travelled for the first time in an aeroplane. As I grew up, my interest got inclined towards engineering, mainly due to the high demand of engineers combined with my strong Mathematics. In my college, I took Electronics and Communication engineering because of my "interest" in Semiconductors and other hardware technology, but during my course of study, I got inclined towards Software Programming and implementing Machine Learning algorithms. During the college placements, I was able to grab a high salary package in core Software Development industry because I stayed open to exploring many fields and not just sticking to one hardware area as per my initial interest. However, there were other students in my batch who strictly stayed in Electronics field because of their "interest" and due to recession in electronics field at the time of placements, they did not get very good job offers, although they were equally hardworking as me. Today, most of them have moved to the Finance sector! Hence, it's important to have an open mind before making a choice. As far as talent is concerned, while some people might have inherent talent in a field but more or less it is a developed trait. As stated by the famous psychologist. Carol S. Dweck, that nothing is fixed, all qualities be it intellectual or talent is developed through hard work and growth mindset. We become better in the area we practice in.
Moreover, in the end, what matters is how easy life is in terms of amenities. Although, it is good to have interests but one should be open to exploring all areas, especially the ones where the availability of jobs is high. After all, until we give it a try, how will we know that this is not worth doing. However, if someone has a strong interest in a field, say A, but job availability is high in field B, and even after thoroughly exploring field B, the person wants to stick to field A, then I believe that it is the right thing to do.
Hence, I would like to conclude by saying that interest and talent are not a fixed parameter, they are likely to change with the parameter "time". One should be pliant when career options are concerned and not be rigid to one particular interest at a particular time, say t1. We should explore the many options and fields around us and then make a decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... to be a pilot in junior school because thats when I travelled for the first time in ...
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Line 2, column 1359, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...t more or less it is a developed trait. As stated by the famous psychologist. Caro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, while, after all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85897435897 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98345083555 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534188034188 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.1150878009 60.3974514979 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.285714286 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2857142857 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303258131869 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746876922181 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10622881125 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218887745029 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114059822538 0.0667264976115 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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