The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The author claims that young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields should be prepared by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. I would like to partially agree with the author's claim as a leader should be cooperative with his own team members and simultaneously competitive with his opponents.
Everyone has become competitive these days; every individual wants to prove himself to be better than others. Hence, in this case, if a leader also thinks about his personal betterment then the system could not work efficiently, and they will end-up competing among themselves. This will apparently stop their overall growth. For instance, in today’s corporate world, the senior members try to steal the credit of their colleagues in order to get temporary fame from the authorities and lose the much-needed support of their mates. This cooperative support from colleagues is very important for the company to function properly. Hence, one can say that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Furthermore, a leader should be able to take a collective decision. He should maintain a jibe between all team members. For example, M. S. Dhoni, former captain of the Indian cricket team, is known to be 'The Captain cool'. He has always given his team first priority over anything else. He always kept the team united and maintained an equilibrium between all the team members from which the team manage to achieve great success. Hence having a co-operative quality in a leader always helps in any field.
In contrast, if a leader lacks competitiveness, he will never try to push himself out of his comfort zone. Hence inhibit the growth of the team. Competitions provoke the individual to beat his opponents, by improving his skillset. For example, in schools and colleges, different competitions are arranged to instill competitive quality among students which will encourage them to do better than others. Likewise, it is also important for a leader to exhibit competitiveness in order to encourage the team to grow.
To sum up, a leader should not only be cooperative with his own team members but also competitive with his opponents. And hence the author's statement- the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition- is partially correct.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, likewise, so, still, then, for example, for instance, in contrast, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 410.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11951219512 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97029613532 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490243902439 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.4621572968 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4090909091 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348295302251 0.243740707755 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109821704516 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.179528070669 0.0758088955206 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236403906421 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150232015237 0.0667264976115 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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