The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Leadership in any sector requires everyone to be amicable with others and mutual co-operation to foster development. The prompt recommends that the best way to make young people effective leader in government, industry or other fields is by gradually creating the feeling of cooperation in them, not competition. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the claim and argue that mutual cooperation plays crucial role to make effective leadership, however, in some cases sense of competition too plays minor role but not as much as sense of cooperation.

Firstly, Leadership is all about listening the views of others while making decision. Imparting the sense of cooperation in young people is likely to result an effective leader. For instance, in every organization, there is a leader who controls the management of the organization. In doing so, if the leader is friendly, or cooperative in nature, almost everyone in the office likes him and that foster positive and brilliant decision. He can listen to everyone's views regarding the topic and filter the wide range of information to make an effective. Thus, the sense of cooperation is likely to make leadership viable in best possible way.

Furthermore, The sense of cooperation makes peace in every field. When a country's government is full of likely-minded people or the industry is accumulated with the people who comply with one another, there will not be any turmoil or dissonant among one another, and that is conducive to foster better improvement of those sector. The sense of cooperation make everyone to be helpful and most importantly, the young people, who are on the verge of successful ladership. This can be an invaluable feature to be instilled in young people to be an effective leadership.

However, some people argue that the sense of competition is more likely to produce desirable result, making young people be well prepared for leadership in government, industry, or other fields. Their assumption lies on the fundamental principle of competition leads to success. Without the competition, no one is able to progress in any endeavor. In fact, even the student needs the sense of competition to get victory in their academia. Moreover, players vie for trophies, which too requires sense of competition. Thus, similarly, to make leader better in every field, it requires sense of competition.

In conclusion, though the feeling of competition, in some cases, is liable to make young people better prepare for better leadership, it is the sense of cooperation that makes them well preapared to be an effective and prodigious leaders. cooperation, mutual trusts, comply with one another is most important to make leadership more effective.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: in the best
...ion is likely to make leadership viable in best possible way. Furthermore, The sense...
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Message: Did you mean 'this sector' or 'those sectors'?
Suggestion: this sector; those sectors
...nducive to foster better improvement of those sector. The sense of cooperation make everyone...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Cooperation
...be an effective and prodigious leaders. cooperation, mutual trusts, comply with one another...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, similarly, so, still, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2285.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 436.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24082568807 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00947760135 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456422018349 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 735.3 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3373078238 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.80952381 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7619047619 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259465250627 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848945070102 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618006225891 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159986688739 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336784564192 0.0667264976115 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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