People spend large amounts of time and money on clothes, hairstyles and make up to change their appearance.
Is it important for people to be concerned about the way they look? What are the consequences of focussing on physical appearance?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
A person’s appearance affects what other people think about them and how they view themselves. However, although being aware of your physical appearance can be healthy, there are negative consequences if a person ignores all other aspects of themself or of others.
A person’s appearance is important because it can affect the impression they make on other people. For example, some jobs require interaction with customers and other members of the public and in these situations, a good personal appearance is often expected. In addition, by trying to improve the way they look, people can build their self-esteem and feel more confident about themselves.
On the other hand, some people are too concerned about their image and often spend a large amount of time and money on fashion and beauty products in order to look attractive. Both men and women feel under pressure to look good and as a result, they may make choices that are harmful to their health. For instance, some women choose to have plastic surgery to improve their physical appearance, while some men may take certain drugs to help them develop a large, muscular body.
Another major problem with focusing on external appearances is that it can cause people to judge themselves and others on the basis of appearances alone. As a result, some people may ignore other issues in life such as developing their interests, learning about life and the world, and interacting effectively with others. Thus, physical appearance should only be one small part of a person.
In summary, personal appearance is often important in our work and social life. However, some people can become too concerned about their image and this may lead them to neglect other aspects of their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 81, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in summary, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08680555556 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58515980459 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548611111111 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1989898189 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.692307692 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1538461538 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342699425593 0.244688304435 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128743656191 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497015275623 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198151960932 0.151304729494 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0245041322201 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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