Our school is the best choice for students considering a career in theatre. First, our school does not require an audition and encourages applicants of all acting experience levels to apply. Second, our students are trained in all major schools of acting methods. Finally, many of our graduates have gone on to achieve acting roles in Broadway productions and Hollywood films.
Directions: Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be addressed in order to decide whether the conclusion and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to the questions would help to evaluate the conclusion.
In the above argument question, the author concludes that their school is the best choice for the students considering a career in theatre. However, while the conclusion might hold water, it rests on several unwarranted assumptions that, if not substantiated will dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore following questions must be addressed to make the conclusion sound better.
Firstly, without taking an audition, is it possible to manage the spate of the applications? Thousands of the individual may apply for the acting and there will be limited seats for class in school. Does it make any sense to make the audition unnecessary? Perhaps, it requires a large area and more infrastructure to address all those applicants in one single school. If the above holds true, the argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, the author of the argument states that their students are trained in all the major schools of acting methods. What is all the major actually means? Without providing suitable evidence, how can the author boast that their students are well trained in all majors? It is possible that there are very few majors in the school compared to the standard number of majors with other schools and those students are good at those pity majors. If the above condition holds water, then the argument falls apart.
Furthermore, the author states, unhesitantly that many students go to broadway productions and Hollywood films. Before asserting those names, it must be answered that how many students out of how much goes to broadway productions and Hollywood films? Without clearly mentioning the average or actual figure, it is impossible to believe the evidence. It is possible 1000 students enrolled in that school, and less than 500 students may be able to be graduated, and out of that, they may be divided into various production areas, of which Broadway and Hollywood films encompass 50 students. If the above condition is true then, the author's argument tear apart. It is, therefore, implausible to rely on the author's argument.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now is flawed due to its reliance on several unfolded assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above questions and provide more trustworthy or compelling evidence, perhaps in the form of a systematic research study, then the argument may be viable and the author position of their school is the best choice for anyone who wants to have a career in theatre is viable.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2034 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.104 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.312 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 321, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ken the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore following questions must be addressed t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 196, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...wered that how many students out of how much goes to broadway productions and Hollyw...
^^^^
Line 4, column 630, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...f the above condition is true then, the authors argument tear apart. It is, therefore, ...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 704, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
..., therefore, implausible to rely on the authors argument. In conclusion, the argument...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2087.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11519607843 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80199161436 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507352941176 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 62.3229464954 57.8364921388 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.380952381 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80952380952 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267830154022 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796203427567 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873669000192 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157650227556 0.128457276422 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803587792553 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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