The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

What are the qualities that great leaders share in common? The very first thing that comes in my mind is the quality to handle people, connect people, which also means good cooperation with various people. The author claims, the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling cooperation and not competition. I mostly agree with the authors claim but, I also admit that in this fast growing world competitiveness is also crucial and all other factors are equally important.

To begin with, cooperation and coordination are necessary factors for growth of any great personality or business. For example, if I am a political leader, with my own sets of opinions. However, in my political party there are many different people with different sets of opinions and likings. In such a case, to build a strong government all the leaders of the political party have to cooperate with each other to stay in power. Hence, cooperation is one of the necessary factor to become a great leader.

In addition to this, I feel, cooperation is not the only factor that brings you up to become a great personality. In this competitive world, where we see competitiveness in each bit of life, for example, while getting an admit in a university. The admission counselling will have hundreds of admission applicants, out of which they will select only a few. In this case, there is of course a competition in between all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly to become a leader, there are many more people who want to become a leader. But, what makes you different from the others is important. Hence, competitiveness plays an important role as well while developing qualities to become an efficient leader.

To conclude, I would like to say both competition and coordination are equally important while building up necessary qualities to become a leader. Nothing can be of lesser importance than other, because, a good leader is not just competitive or coordinative, all other factors are crucially important. Hence, young people should develop in all the qualities and not not just in a single one.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...owever, in my political party there are many different people with different sets of opinions ...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In this competitive world, where we see competitiveness in each bit of life, for...
^^
Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...bit of life, for example, while getting an admit in a university. The admission counsell...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e is of course a competition in between all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...in between all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly to become a leader, there ar...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly to become a leader, there are many more...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...should develop in all the qualities and not not just in a single one.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example, i feel, in addition, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93871866295 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91035034327 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487465181058 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3523448738 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236990789946 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778382858897 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125919181612 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148480802343 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076372580059 0.0667264976115 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...owever, in my political party there are many different people with different sets of opinions ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In this competitive world, where we see competitiveness in each bit of life, for...
^^
Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...bit of life, for example, while getting an admit in a university. The admission counsell...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 416, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e is of course a competition in between all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 445, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...in between all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly to become a leader, there ar...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 455, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
... all of the candidates to get an admit. Similarly to become a leader, there are many more...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 363, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: not
...should develop in all the qualities and not not just in a single one.
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, similarly, so, still, well, while, for example, i feel, in addition, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93871866295 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91035034327 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487465181058 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.3523448738 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8947368421 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.89473684211 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236990789946 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778382858897 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125919181612 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148480802343 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076372580059 0.0667264976115 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.1392134831 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.