the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competitio

The argument concentrates on improving one of the most important soft skill: leadership. It states that instilling a sense of cooperation will prepare leaders in a much better way than competition. However, the argument has it's own pros and cons.
Inculcating cooperation amongst young minds is quite essential. Knowing how to cooperate with each other is what makes a successful leader. Consider team sports, where every player has a crucial role which contributes towards winning of the team. If any of the player does not perform, it affects the performance of whole team. In my school, our basketball team was one of the best in whole region because of the understanding and coordination we all shared. Every member motivated other to perform better. Even if one person from our team had been indifferent it would have led to downfall of everyone.
What defines a great leader is how he or she makes his whole team to follow and cooperate with each other. Leader plays a very important role in maintaining harmony in the team. Leaders in government, industry and other fields usually have to meet a lot of people, and knowing how to cooperate with them is important for a successful leader. For example, a successful leader in government should be able to organize people in different departments. He has to cooperate efficiently with the people he leads. In business, a leader must cooperate with employees to have a successful corporation. This requires a strong sense of cooperation, so a society should prepare its young people by instilling this quality in them.
Although, healthy competition never hurts anybody. Competition is what makes people perform and outshine. It definitely brings out leadership qualities among them. Some have it naturally and some of them develop it through different situations. I remember in my childhood, my father always encouraged a healthy competition by motivating me to perform better whether in sports, academics or any other co-curricular activity. This developed leadership qualities in me in a much better way. Through competition only I realized there were leadership qualities instilled in me and I worked towards polishing them further.
we should recognize that both are important in our society. For example, although there exists fierce competition between different companies, they often have to cooperate with each other. A company may compete with another company in a kind of product, but they may have other areas in which they work together. A company providing searching service may be working together with a company providing safety software, such as sharing some algorithms or some data. However, they may have minor competition on advertising on another service. This illustrates that cooperation is also important in this society and we should instill in our youth a sense of both.
Therefore, a conclusion can be drawn that building a sense of cooperation is important for creating better leaders but a healthy competition shouldn't be avoided. In fact, it should be encouraged. Only one can't be chosen as both play a crucial role in development of great leaders.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...mber motivated other to perform better. Even if one person from our team had been indif...
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...ple by instilling this quality in them. Although, healthy competition never hurts anybod...
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Suggestion: We
...worked towards polishing them further. we should recognize that both are importan...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...etter leaders but a healthy competition shouldnt be avoided. In fact, it should be encou...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...fact, it should be encouraged. Only one cant be chosen as both play a crucial role i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, as to, for example, in fact, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 507.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18737672584 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95420320589 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481262327416 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0789741147 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.696969697 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3636363636 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.90909090909 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202519710592 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485001437299 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702146584234 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100813836493 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603929588664 0.0667264976115 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.23 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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The argument concentrates on improving one of the most important soft skill: leadership. It states that instilling a sense of cooperation will prepare leaders in a much better way than competition. However, the argument has it's own pros and cons.
Inculcating cooperation amongst young minds is quite essential. Knowing how to cooperate with each other is what makes a successful leader. Consider team sports, where every player has a crucial role which contributes towards winning of the team. If any of the player does not perform, it affects the performance of whole team. In my school, our basketball team was one of the best in whole region because of the understanding and coordination we all shared. Every member motivated other to perform better. Even if one person from our team had been indifferent, it would have led to downfall of everyone.
What defines a great leader is how he or she makes his whole team to follow and cooperate with each other. Leader plays a very important role in maintaining harmony in the team. Leaders in government, industry and other fields usually have to meet a lot of people, and knowing how to cooperate with them is important for a successful leader. For example, a successful leader in government should be able to organize people in different departments. He has to cooperate efficiently with the people he leads. In business, a leader must cooperate with employees to have a successful corporation. This requires a strong sense of cooperation, so a society should prepare its young people by instilling this quality in them.
On the other hand, it should als be considered that competition is what makes people perform and outshine. It definitely brings out leadership qualities among them. Some have it naturally and some of them develop it through different situations. I remember in my childhood, my father always encouraged a healthy competition by motivating me to perform better whether in sports, academics or any other co-curricular activity. This developed leadership qualities in me in a much better way. Through competition only I realized there were leadership qualities instilled in me and I worked towards polishing them further.
We should recognize that both are important in our society. For example, although there exists fierce competition between different companies, they often have to cooperate with each other. A company may compete with another company in a kind of product, but they may have other areas in which they work together. A company providing searching service may be working together with a company providing safety software, such as sharing some algorithms or some data. However, they may have minor competition on advertising on another service. This illustrates that cooperation is also important in this society and we should instill in our youth a sense of both.
Therefore, a conclusion can be drawn that building a sense of cooperation is important for creating better leaders but a healthy competition should not be avoided. In fact, it should be encouraged. Only one can't be chosen as both play a crucial role in development of great leaders.