Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The topic addresses on issue of whether virtues, ascribed a single personality by the majority of people, chosen as a hero, can be an aggregate of the same features of society? While examining the characteristics of heroes and role models, the society choses as paragons of its highest ideals, might reveal the expectations and ideas prevailed in society, studying these idols might not give a clear idea of characteristics, prevailing in the given society.
There is a well known psychological phenomenon when people use to ascribe a person they interact with some features that they want him/her to possess. However, regardless of how well people know a particular person, they still won't be able to understand his/her personality to full extent, thus substituting it with an ideal image. Moreover, people use to attribute positive features to individuals they like the most, ignoring the true aspects of their personal life. And the famous people prefer to support this ideal image, present i minds of their followers. For example, popular movie stars and pop singers can suffer from drug abuse and heavy psychological problems, however, this aspect of their personality is hidden from the public. Therefore, studying the character of role model can get little insight of the character of society.
Worship of some heroes and role models can be forcefully imposed to the society. For example, some dictatorial countries forcefully create an image of an ideal ruler among their citizens. the failure to demonstrate a respect and reverence to the create image will have deleterious effects to a member of such society. Definitely, these image does not reveal the highest ideals of society, instead, trying to substitute the true values with artificial ones, to preserve its power and influence While the prevalent excitement of the generous, virtuous and wise "father of the nation," imposed by propoganda, can clearly tell about the society being oppressed, it cannot reveal the characteristics of the society.
Heroes and role models, choosen by society, aggregate all the desirable features that society ascribes itself. These features use to guide the society towards achieving an ideal personality. However, most of these virtues are exaggerated and the ideals, attributed to the role models, in some cases might not coincide with the true goals of the society. Therefore, the detailed study of these features might be misleading and misrepresent the true character of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35279187817 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89935379277 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520304568528 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.621414649 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.8125 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210360921331 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752152959159 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795441525875 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14780390037 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737508395462 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.56 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.