The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The main purpose of the fast paced technological development was to save the humanity from most of the routine and monotonous work, making their life easier and giving them more time for self-development. Indeed, to some technological conveniences, available to the modern generation, far exceed those that our ancestors were dreaming about. However, the issue is whether these conveniences make us weaker and more dependent on the technology? I believe, that the benefits, given by the modern technology overweight the possible concerns regarding the future degradation of human race.
Let's consider the most ubiquitous technology of the modern days -- the Internet. Among the obvious benefits of this highly proliferated met work is the ease of the access to information. In comparison with the search for info in pre-internet era, when one needed to spend hours in libraries in order to find an article or excerpt, containing the desired information, nowadays, it is a matter of minutes or even seconds to get an access for the waste amount of knowledge. The high speed of retrieval and processing information makes us cognizant and independent, thus benefiting towards the self-development.
Another example of technology are social networks, that facilitate communication between people, allowing faster exchange of news, messages, content, etc. The necessity of this technology in inspiring independent thinking and protecting personal freedoms manifested during the social protests. In dictatorial countries the social networks become the only mean to control protests, which would not have been possible without this technology. For example, the activists were able to invite people for meeting via Facebook during Arabic Spring. Thus, it is hard to underestimate the role of the modern technology in facilitating independent thinking and combating the propaganda.
There are also contradictory opinions regarding the modern technologies. The widespread of means of communications results in the lack of private life, making the people are more dependent from each other. Or the opponents assert that the technology affects children’s' motivation to develop some skills. For example introducing calculators resulted in degradation of numerical skills, easily access to videos resulted in decline of reading. However, the detailed scrutiny will reveal that the benefits of technology prevail over the loses. The proper control and regulation of kids' time can help them to manage their time and their interests.
In conclusion, the benefits that modern technology brings to humanity are hard to underestimate. It not only results in preventing us from mundane monotonous work, but gives us an access to information and the global community, which is beneficial for further self-development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e future degradation of human race. Lets consider the most ubiquitous technology...
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...e ease of the access to information. In comparison with the search for info in pre-interne...
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...ining the desired information, nowadays, it is a matter of minutes or even second...
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...atter of minutes or even seconds to get an access for the waste amount of knowledge. The ...
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...enefiting towards the self-development. Another example of technology are social...
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...m mundane monotonous work, but gives us an access to information and the global community...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, second, so, thus, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67298578199 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20918306907 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575829383886 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1415057053 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0697694993547 0.243740707755 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0194720529272 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0255560019895 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0420066147363 0.150359130593 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.018982871293 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 100.480337079 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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