The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It is true that the luxuries and technologies have developed in a unprecedented pace, thus hindering some human cognitive abilities. However, we could not deny that the advancement in technology has enabled us to solve problems that were considered impossible in the past.
Admittedly, for people who cannot afford luxuries, these products may take them down to ruins. Although luxuries may be a way to express one's social position, it would be unreasonable to purchase such products if you are financially incompetent. The addiction to luxuries may lead to materialism. These people have a disposition to express themselves by their possessions rather than their abilities. For instance, Sleepy a Korean singer is well known for his love of luxuries: he sold his house to afford a Rolex watch and is now living day by day to absolve his dept. Hence, people should show self-discipline whether they are too into these extravagant materials.
Furthermore, because technological inventions are available within the reach of our hands, we utilize it instead of thinking for ourselves. The epitome of this syndrome is the usage of calculators in elementary schools. Instead of teaching students how to add, subtract and multiply, contemporary educators focus on teaching how to use a calculator. This foils the student's numerical abilities which is essential for logical thinking. Another example is automobiles that are rampant in our streets. Modern workers use cars to move even short distances resulting in diabetes, obesity and not to mention a lack of leg muscles. Consequently, the everyday inventions have deteriorated our abilities as humans.
Nevertheless, due to the unprecedented development of technology, we have been able to solve problems that were considered enigmatic. For instance, with the development of general purpose graphic processing units - a top notch calculator inside a computer - computer engineers have been able to make a major breakthrough in artificial intelligence: the Deep Learning which has countless applications from image classification to natural language processing. Therefore, asseverations that technology has compromised the human intellect would be derogatory. Rather, there are some discipline where these paramount innovations help push the intellectual boundaries of humans further.
In conclusion, luxuries may have severe consequences when penurious people are to enjoy them and technology in some aspects has debilitated our cognition. Nonetheless, technology still helps us in delving into the unknown further.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ries and technologies have developed in a unprecedented pace, thus hindering some...
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Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: top-notch
...al purpose graphic processing units - a top notch calculator inside a computer - computer...
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Line 7, column 304, Rule ID: MAJOR_BREAKTHROUGH[1]
Message: Use simply 'breakthrough'.
Suggestion: breakthrough
...uter engineers have been able to make a major breakthrough in artificial intelligence: the Deep Le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67098445596 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26164045193 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611398963731 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.0035661594 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.238095238 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.380952381 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0990742615588 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0249056353221 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0255259541492 0.0758088955206 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0494706366546 0.150359130593 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156783987771 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.61 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.77 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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