The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning f

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The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Over the fast few years, mankind has experienced accelerated growth in lifestyle. This has been enabled by innovations in technology. However, the luxuries offered by these technological innovations need not necessarily prevent people from becoming strong and independent individuals.

One might argue that the prehistoric men were strong and independent in true meaning. They possessed the physical power to survive the varying climatic conditions and independently gathered food or hunted to satisfy their hunger. Reasoning by this argument one can argue that the current generation of people is not strong and independent when compared to the prehistoric man. However one must remember that with changing times the definition of a strong and independent individual has also changed. Being strong no longer means having physical strength but refers to intelligence and emotional strength one must possess to navigate the ups and downs of life. Along similar lines, being independent symbolizes the ability to think and identify what is best for oneself.

Going by the modern definition of a strong and independent individual, I argue that the conveniences of modern-day do not always hamper a person’s development. In some cases, these luxuries even bolster the person’s development process by allowing the person to invest precious time into important activities, which was once wasted doing perfunctory jobs. Recent advancements by companies like Google, Microsoft under the leadership of strong individuals like Sundar Pichai and Satya Nadella have enabled further innovations which have propelled mankind’ s progress.

In light of the previous discussion, I would like to add that the offered luxuries and conveniences do have their pros and cons. In modern times, becoming a strong individual who expresses free independent ideas has become a choice. People who use these luxuries carefully and not become slaves to these conveniences have developed into extremely fine and independent individuals, leading our society.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.73202614379 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07654529181 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59477124183 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1516189989 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.933333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73333333333 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213727637201 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06659962175 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518300829726 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123900678516 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.011271166768 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.95 12.1639044944 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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