Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
In a free world that we live in currently, everything around is evolving everyday. The attitude towards people who are willing to take the risk and pursue their own dreams is also changing. A claim states that even though young people often receive the advice to "follow your own dreams ", more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals. The reasoning behind such a claim states that many people's dream are inherently selfish. I stand against such a claim and in my opinion, the reasoning behind this claim is also too extreme. The paragraphs below will explain my position in brief and why I stand against the claim.
A person who pursues his or her dream does so with utmost discipline and punctuality. There is a zeal and a zest to provide a substantial contribution to the world through the domain, a person is interested in. What if an individual who is interested in nuclear physics, is told to pursue a career in astrophysics? Will he be able to generate the desired output in terms of new findings? Not at all. If a person is not motivated by the work he does, it would be an absolute waste of a potential talent. The reason behind the claim states that many people's dreams are inherently selfish. I put forward my reasoning and state that if pursuing your dream makes you happy and content with your life, being selfish is justified.
The claim also states that more emphasis should be placed upon selecting worthy goals. In my opinion, a person would himself be the the best judge of what according to him is a worthy goal. A worthy goal in today's world would be to become a machine learning engineer or a data scientist, if we talk about the computing domain. If we assume that a student chooses the aforementioned domain because it is a worthy goal in the eyes of the people. What assurance can the people provide that machine learning and data science would be a worthy domain by the time a student graduates form college? What if the domain has lost it's charm over the years? This would put the student in a rather precarious situation since the domain he has chosen neither interests him nor can he find a job related to it. Hence, it is advisable to follow one's dreams, because in doing so, it would spare the person from disappointment in later stages of life.
It is usually the parents that put their expectations and their dreams on top of a child. They see their child as a means through which they can achieve all the things in life that they themselves could not. Such an act would be something that is selfish. I would rather side by the kid and motivate him or her to pursue what they think is best for them. Having a dream and pursuing it is not selfish. But pursuing someone else's dream would be definitely wrong.
In sum, I stand against the claim as well as the reasoning given to support it. In my opinion, if pursuing your own dreams is selfish, it is good to be selfish, rather than being a circus lion who does whatever the ring master tells him to do.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 74, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...urrently, everything around is evolving everyday. The attitude towards people who are wi...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...n my opinion, a person would himself be the the best judge of what according to him is ...
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Line 5, column 129, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...n my opinion, a person would himself be the the best judge of what according to him is ...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to engineer'
Suggestion: to engineer
...d would be to become a machine learning engineer or a data scientist, if we talk about t...
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Line 5, column 830, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...to it. Hence, it is advisable to follow ones dreams, because in doing so, it would s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, well, in brief, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5376146789 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48231858622 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460550458716 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.6342531843 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.4333333333 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.23333333333 5.21951772744 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330841005538 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862548376431 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107390962763 0.0758088955206 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179596737223 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901304836931 0.0667264976115 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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