Claim Even though young people often receive the advice to follow your dreams more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals Reason Many people s dreams are inherently selfish

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Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.

Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.

Dreams are the reasons for which a person work relentlessly throughout its' life. When the question arises whether to pursue a dream, it is acceptable to ruminate over the thought as the decision may completely change a person's life. As per the Newton's third law of motion, "Every action has an equal and opposite reactions" so the law is applicable in real life too. If you pursue your dream, your actions may affect other people and if you don't pursue the dream, the thoughts will affect you. In this case it is better to follow your dreams rather than regretting whole life. Below are the reasons why one should follow it's dreams though your dream may cause some ill effects.
Firstly, successful people are the one's who had dreamed big. The famous historic figure Adolf Hitler, is one of the most successful and cruel leaders in the history of the world. It was Hitler's dream to overcome Germany from severe hardships and merge into economically strong nation. To fulfil his dreams he killed millions of innocent people. But, it was due to his due diligence, dream and efforts that Germany is one of the powerful nations. Similarly, if your dream is for good cause to your close one’s than there is nothing wrong in following it.
Secondly, since childhood if a kid is taught to think before you dream, if such is the case than there would be no Bill Gates, Ambani(Richest man of India) in this world. Ambani in his childhood left his hometown and came to Mumbai( Financial capital city of India) to pursue his dreams. At that moment he acted selfish and didn't thought of his parents. As it was his dream to see his parents overcome poverty and live a luxurious life. Similarly, a child should audacious to take a firm decisions leaving it's consequences it the decision is going to be fruitful in future.
Lastly, Following dreams is to work hard and to deceive others. Furthermore, the dream should be ethical and morally sound and not impact the lives of other people. For instance, In 1950 India was ruled by kings and the king’s son used to kill the king and it’s sibling to become the ruler. One should dream big and work hard to follow it rather to follow incorrect path. In the above example instead of killing it's sibling and father , the son could work hard on it's skill that would ultimately make his way to become a king.
In conclusion one should have a dream and work hard on it to fulfil it, but at the same time fulfilling dreams should circumscribed to certain protocols too.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Suggestion: don't
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, third, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 444.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66216216216 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44596806041 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518018018018 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 626.4 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6758149812 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.0 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247031715664 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819446954422 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647598272954 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141053731782 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481428468123 0.0667264976115 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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