Claim Even though young people often receive the advice to follow your dreams more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals Reason Many people s dreams are inherently selfish | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.

Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.

In today's world where most people are consumed by hedonistic pleasures of life, moral values such as altruism seem to be declining. The promt suggestss that in order to overcome this issue, the need to pick more worthy and selfless goals should be prioritized over following one's dream. I mostly disagree with the statement due to a few reasons about which I will elucidate below. However, I do concede that a few moral programs or changes could be taken into consideration to help make a more selfless world.

One reason why I mostly disagree with the prompt is that in an independant nation, I believe every individual has the right to make their own choice. Any kind of limitation or restriction should not be interfering with and affecting the choice of another. Moreover, everyone should be liable for their own actions. Afterall, a forced decision will eventually only result in retaliation or apathy towards ones goals.

The second reason why I am mostly against this statement is that the compromize on the skill that comes from choosing something that one may not be very good at. This limitation refrains a person from being the best version of himself/herself. He/she may end up choosing a career that he/she thinks may benefit the common good of the people but eventually restrict their own growth. This can best be expemplfied through an example of the students in my engineering college. Almost majority of the students in my class chose this line of career because of the importance it holds. Eventually, today after completing three years most realized that they are not fit for the respective field and have ended up making a change in their respective careers

Thus, although more importance or emphasis placed on choosing a more worthy goal could in some way lead to the welfare of a state, country or even the world, one must always be given the free will to choose to follow their dreams. Also, every person should be given a fair and equal opportunity to utilize their skill and talent to the fullest. Becasue afterall, what is the point in doing something you don't like or are not good at?

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...ll, what is the point in doing something you dont like or are not good at?
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...at is the point in doing something you dont like or are not good at?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83516483516 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60544444963 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.4775421897 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184386686462 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053939176358 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575478214525 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114085345267 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602002155526 0.0667264976115 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: