Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to "follow your dreams", more emphasis should be placed on picking up worthy goals.
Reason: Many people's dreams are inherently selfish.
The issue of whether young people should often be advised to follow their dreams or pick up worthy goals has engendered controversy and can be divided into two schools of thought. On the one hand, staunch defenders support that children should be left totally free to make and pursue their dreams. On the other hand, opponents contend that usually young people’s dreams are selfish, undermining any effort of reality and worthy goals. Were I in such an ambiguous position to choose between the two, I would support the latter argument sound even though the former one has some positive attributes.
First and foremost, childhood is the most innocent part of our lives and this that promotes all those circumstances where everything is possible without any limits and prohibitions. Indeed, we all have good memories from our childhood and the advises we received to “follow our dreams”. The latter one was mainly a goading from the older ones who were experiencing the real harsh conditions of life, so they wanted young people to dream and imagine a better world for everyone. Although it sounds good as a suggestion, it leads individuals to create a future according to their preferences; something totally selfish that has nothing to do with worthy goals. All that dream is likely to collapse one day, as life will soon present its real hard face.
Second, picking up worthy goals and avoid unrealizable dreams constitutes an advantage for equal and prolific societies. Admittedly, when young children learn the fundamentals of a prosperous way of life and get involved in practical daily conditions, they tend to become more responsible and possess disciplines. For example, many children in the rural parts of Greece could be dreamed to become one day astronauts, something that although its robust meaning could be extremely difficult to be achieved. On the contrary, if their families suggest that they should study and be involved in agricultural business, this constitutes a worthy goal since the rural parts of Greece thrive in terms of agricultural productivity.
According to the other school of thought, limiting the freedom and mainly the dreams of young people could not have led to many achievements of our modern world. It is clearly illustrated at the case of the Wright Brothers who invented the airplane. The Wright Brothers, although carpenters as a profession, had an ambitious dream; they wanted to tame the skies. At the beginning this was considered to be something impossible, but on account of their dreams and perseverance the brothers designed and developed the first airplanes. Hence, their dream came true providing the world a cheap and fast way of transport.
I wholeheartedly believe that young people should always have dreams and pursue them. It is up to them and mainly up to their educators to fully understand the real world and as a result set their dreams and hopes on making it a better place to live. Even if we accept that worthy goals mainly have numerous advantages rather than questionable anticipations, we have to think what would not have happened without any imagination and determination.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, so, for example, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2662.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 516.0 442.535393258 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15891472868 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85608883 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52519379845 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 798.3 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3549976141 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.761904762 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290458404767 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862068431301 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694115377056 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164137383314 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559772613337 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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