Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Although financial problem is one of the most important part in administration of cities, I disagree with the claim that governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive, while I agree with the reason that it is primariily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Granted, since the cultural traditions are preserved by people, citizen in this case, major cities have significant role in preservation of cultural traditions, and development of new culture based on past. Thus, there is no question that the center of the one nation's culture is major cities, and I agree with the suggested reason.
However, suggested reason cannot be sufficient to justify the claim that the financial support of each citied must be ensured. First of all, as mentioned above, major cities have lots of citizens inside, so they make new source of income easily relative to the other minor cities. In the case that the major and minor cities encountered with same crisis, although major cities will possibly be damaged by it, but minor cities will likely be devastated by it. Because the minor cities are also the one that government should concern, the government should take care about the minor cities. Since the resource of the government is limited, major cities should have its ability to treat the national crisis. For example, in COVID-19 crisis, one of the major city of Seoul, which have high financial independency, treat themselves well by their own financials, so other minor cities such as Daejeon can be supported by government. If government should support the Seoul, than maybe other minor cities cannot be supported. Therefore, they should not lean on the financial support of the main government, but earn their financials themselves.
In summary, although I agree with the suggested reason, but it seems like insufficient to support the claim that government must guarantee the financial support for the major cities. It is problem of thrive in pacific days, but it can possibly be problem of threat in crisis situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 297, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...on that it is primariily in cities that a nations cultural traditions are preserved and g...
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Line 3, column 967, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...If government should support the Seoul, than maybe other minor cities cannot be supp...
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Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...oblem of thrive in pacific days, but it can possibly be problem of threat in crisis situatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in summary, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1771.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 346.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11849710983 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66396393854 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468208092486 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7467438463 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.230769231 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6153846154 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418140000369 0.243740707755 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161803049802 0.0831039109588 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105101365535 0.0758088955206 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285148723621 0.150359130593 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12298378166 0.0667264976115 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.