Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Major cities of every country like New Delhi in India, are the hubs for the economy, business, and education. The author has adduced that the cities are where cultural traditions are preserved and the government should provide financial assistance in order to promote its growth which I disagree with. I advocate that cultural traditions are more preserved in rural areas of the country and there are some other more important reasons to underwrite cities.
The city contains a wide variety of people because it attracts millions of people every year from all over the world. People immigrate to major cities for better job opportunities, excellent education, and quality of life. For example, the city of France, Paris which was known for the world's fashion capital and cheese in the past, now you can't find those cultural traditions mainly because it hosts different kinds of people and the city has changed to accommodate their needs. But if you go to the villages and towns of France, you will get more cultural feel as compared to Paris. Also, the life of people living in the cities is more difficult and they have to work more hours to make living resulting in indifference towards traditions. Hence, the reason cited is not true and cannot be served as valid.
Even if we agree that cities are where cultural tradition is preserved, there are more important areas of development which need attention such as infrastructure, land and increasing pollution. Cities are always developing and it continues to hosts more people which demands better infrastructure and facilities. They are the most revenue-generating area for the government because of MNCs, lot more local businesses, and an attractive quality of life. For instance, Bangalore, an IT hub of India, serves as bread and butter for all the software engineers graduates and hosts more than 10 million software engineers every year. Due to this, the city is becoming overly crowded and resulted in housing and traffic problems. The government failed to anticipate the tech boom and was not prepared to handle the outburst of people and failed to provide infrastructure development like creating big roads, housing assistance which resulted in shifting the IT industry to another city, Hyderabad. If the government has focussed on these areas, they would not have lost so much money in terms of tax revenue and its importance would have been preserved. Hence, there are some other important factors, primarily why people move to the cities where the government should focus on.
In conclusion, I agree with the author that governments should provide financial support to promote the development of its major cities but the reason for cultural tradition's preservation is misleading and weak. There are certainly other factors that are more vigilant and important and the government should focus to invest money in the right places.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...capital and cheese in the past, now you cant find those cultural traditions mainly b...
^^^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'host'.
Suggestion: host
...e always developing and it continues to hosts more people which demands better infras...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...ality of life. For instance, Bangalore, an IT hub of India, serves as bread and butte...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 948, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...g assistance which resulted in shifting the IT industry to another city, Hyderabad. If...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'traditions'' or 'tradition's'?
Suggestion: traditions'; tradition's
...ajor cities but the reason for cultural traditions preservation is misleading and weak. Th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15042372881 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74387800848 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487288135593 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2909503672 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.947368421 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27651801655 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902530687834 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653001711992 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193661581879 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314653203044 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 342, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...capital and cheese in the past, now you cant find those cultural traditions mainly b...
^^^^
Line 5, column 244, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'host'.
Suggestion: host
...e always developing and it continues to hosts more people which demands better infras...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
...ality of life. For instance, Bangalore, an IT hub of India, serves as bread and butte...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 948, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...g assistance which resulted in shifting the IT industry to another city, Hyderabad. If...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'traditions'' or 'tradition's'?
Suggestion: traditions'; tradition's
...ajor cities but the reason for cultural traditions preservation is misleading and weak. Th...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15042372881 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74387800848 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487288135593 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2909503672 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.947368421 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8421052632 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27651801655 0.243740707755 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902530687834 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653001711992 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193661581879 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314653203044 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.