Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Our planet is designed in such a way that it cannot survive without maintaining the ecological balance. Every specie on this planet plays a significant role in maintaining this balance. But human beings, the smartest species on the earth, has been insidiously working towards destroying this balance for their own good. For the past few decades, problems like Global Warming, the Ozone layer, and the extinction of several species has been surfacing our planet. I agree with the author that society should make efforts to save endangered species only if human activities are responsible for their extinction. However, there are two kinds of human intervention, direct and indirect, and both should be taken into account.
Firstly, direct intervention i.e activities like hunting, trading, and using parts of the animal body to make products. For instance, Salman Khan hunted an endangered specie in Alwar. Trading of leopards is also a very common activity. People use the skin of these animals to create products like leather shoes, jackets, and other products. This direct intervention affects the most as it involves direct killing. Hence, to protect these species, these activities should be prohibited.
Secondly, indirect intervention such as cutting of jungles, greenhouse effect, and global warming. Humans are cutting jungles to get more land, economic gains like fossil fuel, and industrialization. Destroying the forest indirectly affects these species since jungles are home for various species and these activities are forcing them to migrate to some other place which may not be suitable for their survival. The rising temperature of the planet also affects biodiversity. Animals like penguins who live in Ice made continents like Antarctica. For them, extreme cold temperature is necessary for their survival. Now, because of global warming, ice is melting and the rising temperature is making survival for these ice loving animals harder and harder. Therefore, indirect intervention also plays a significant role in the survival of these endangered species and efforts should be made to mitigate these effects as far as possible.
To sum up, if humans are responsible for the extinction of endangered species, direct or indirect, strict efforts should be made to protect what we have left. Our survival depends upon their survival.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1993.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44535519126 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78576667791 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535519125683 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.1979156598 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5909090909 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213252461186 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631789341572 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822508673526 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140165447387 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054325669542 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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