I agree with the author that at universities and colleges, sports and social activities are equally important as academics and receive equal financial support from the committee. The following are the main ideas behind my thesis.
Firstly, extra-curricular activities like sports, social, and cultural events promote personality development. We live in social society and thus the basic social skills are primacy to survive in this atmosphere. For instance, everyone should know how to talk to other people, behave in public, how to present themselves, and influence others. If someone is well educated like a Ph.D. but he or she does not know how to give a presentation and work with other people, he or she will not be able to use his or her skills appropriately. For example, Every professor should know how to manage students under him or her. Similarly, every employee should be good at talking to other people and pitching ideas. Extracurricular activities help an individual to develop these skills. Therefore, every school and university should give equal importance to extra-curricular activities by providing equal financial support.
Secondly, sports keep us fit and healthy. For instance, if someone is good at Football, this sport works as a hobby to an individual and forces an individual to remain fit and exercise regularly. Sports also keep us fit mentally. Student life is hectic and stressful. They go to school in the morning, after coming back, they have to work on their lessons and complete a myriad number of assignments. After all this, sports calm our mind, keep us occupied in our free time, and works as a therapy from a long working day. Therefore, every university and school should motivate their students to join one sport and participate in social activities.
Thirdly, someone can argue that what if a student does not have time for extra-curricular activities and parents spend their hard-earned money to study, not for playing in the school. If this is true, extra-curricular activities become even more important to learn time management. Also, every parent sends their children to school for overall development. I agree that academics are important but sports, organizing an event, or participating in the cultural activities are equally important as well. Therefore, every school and university should afford a tantamount amount of funds to promote students' overall development.
To sum up, every university and school should give equal importance to sports, cultural events, and other activities as academics. Because extra-curricular activities promote personality development, keep us fit and healthy both physically and mentally, and also teach us in time management, thus, ensure overall development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 266, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to time'
Suggestion: to time
...ies become even more important to learn time management. Also, every parent sends th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, after all, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38425925926 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06938159815 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497685185185 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8706109056 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9166666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236781871627 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734930823682 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910894572643 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164699330612 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107137370476 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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