Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
From a Clash of Civilizations and cultures, the global dialogue has moved to the fragility of civilisation and culture as a concept in of itself. And there is no denying the fact that culture and tradition are the backbone of a nation's identity and must be upheld at all times. The prompt suggests that governments must financially support major cities as they are the primary custodians of cultural traditions. Major cities, undoubtedly, are the driving force behind a nation's prosperity and development. Having said that, in my opinion, I mostly disagree with this suggestion for three reasons.
Firstly, I argue that major cities are not the sole custodians of a nation's cultural traditions. A nation's culture comprises of the ideas, customs, traditions, values, beliefs and social behaviour of people at large. And people do not live only in big cities - they are equally spread across smaller cities and the countryside. One may argue that major cities are representative of the population at large and hence the culture. But on the contrary, to accommodate the variation in the population, major cities are known to develop a neutral or cosmopolitan culture. For example, in a country like India, a major city like Mumbai hardly gives a flavour of the country's rich heritage and tradition. The reason lies in the commercial or economic role of the city, which becomes primary - pushing everything else to a secondary status.
Secondly, irrespective of a country's economic condition, the public expenditure budgets are always stretched between competing needs. Primary among them are education, healthcare and security. Thus, directing too much of Government attention or public resources towards preserving cultural traditions may not augur well for a nation's prosperity. One may suggest that maintaining a nation's culture is the primary duty of a Government. But, history through the ages teaches us that cultures are enriched through prosperity and not vice versa. Places like Egypt, Persia, India and China are a testimony of the fact that a vibrant culture thrives on prosperity brought through trade and commerce. Even today, in agrarian economies, it is commonplace to observe the major cultural festivals after crop harvest.
Thirdly, the cost of financial support would be much higher in major cities owing to a higher cost of maintaining infrastructure and organising people. Alternatively, such initiatives could be spread across smaller cities and countryside. This will not only reduce the burden on state exchequer but also provide an uncluttered space for the cultural showcase. Moreover, this will lead to economic prosperity and development of smaller places. For example, 'Taj Mahal' - a major tourist attraction, has immensely contributed to the development and prosperity of 'Agra' - the city which houses it.
Of course, one may argue that the essence of a society's culture can be found in its major cities. However, culture is much more than an aggregation of individuals. Culture is also about a society's relationship with its religion, animals, plants and other societies. And the view can be a welcome revelation outside the city boundaries. As a wise seer once said "To know your true self, just observe what you do when no one is watching"
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ure and tradition are the backbone of a nations identity and must be upheld at all time...
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Line 1, column 471, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ubtedly, are the driving force behind a nations prosperity and development. Having said...
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Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...r cities are not the sole custodians of a nations cultural traditions. A nations culture ...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
... cultural traditions. A nations culture comprises of the ideas, customs, traditions, values,...
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Line 5, column 327, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ral traditions may not augur well for a nations prosperity. One may suggest that mainta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, of course, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2764.0 2235.4752809 124% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29501915709 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97119521121 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530651340996 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.6721407382 60.3974514979 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.3103448276 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58620689655 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303258741774 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756961628566 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726513434261 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164426016335 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0648698923294 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 100.480337079 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.