Claim: It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Reason: The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.
It is said that having any living man or woman as a hero for society is impossible because when they are subjected to media scrutiny, their fame will be reduced. I agree with this argument to some extent.
A hero is someone who does something exceptional that ordinary people can not do. Each society can have different heroes in different fields such as science, sport, movie, and politics. But the most important problem for any famous person or hero is the media. In media, individuals try to aim heroes and leak their lives for individuals for different reasons. For example, how they could be successful? What is the secret of their success? In this way, the life of famous people is controlled and most of the time they even can have normal social life as they always should scape from the journalists or people who work in media. We have to consider that all people are not complex and each person can have some positive aspects or negative ones. When you are not a hero for others it is not important to know that about your life but when you become famous and you overshadow the lives of some people. Your life becomes important and all aspect of your life is subjected to media scrutiny. So, when people become aware of the negative aspects of your life, they start to judge you, and you are compared with other heroes with the positive aspects of their lives. Therefore, you lose their fame after a while and then people do consider you as a hero.
However, media always is not bad and most of the time create and introduce a new hero to people. For example, Maryam Aghakhani in Iran was a famous mathematician and I did not know her until she was introduced by media to people. when I familiarized myself with her life, I became more passionate about math and always she was my hero for being successful in my life. She always remained a hero for many people because she only tried to limit media to the scientific aspect of her life. I believe that famous people always can be as a hero if they have enough control over the media and their lives and respect the moral points. For example, Pari Hilton is not considered as a hero because she always wants to prove that children and young people can be successful without going to school. She always shows her glamorous lifestyle. Parents do not like her as a hero because of the things that they know about her life through the media.
Comments
"Therefore, you lose their
"Therefore, you lose their fame after a while and then people do consider you as a hero" - It seems that this sentence is wrong.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is always
...onsider you as a hero. However, media always is not bad and most of the time create and...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 231, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
... she was introduced by media to people. when I familiarized myself with her life, I ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1966.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51954022989 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31275107723 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427586206897 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9351748236 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3636363636 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7727272727 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196124660584 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721638568388 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721548296539 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182871869225 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731591526693 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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