In contemporary times, people can see the power of media scrutiny that could influence someone’s reputation. The author asserts that because of media’s scrutiny, it is hard to fine any living man or woman as a hero. However, this paper will convey this is not always true with below reasons and examples.
Admittedly, it is easy to find someone who were suddenly famous but after getting reputation, a media investigated all aspect of him or her and proliferated their shortcoming to public. Tiger Woods might be given one of the best examples of this cases. He had been known as a best pro-golfer, but after media focused to his private relationship with several women, he is no longer famous for his talent, but for his secret relations. Another example also could be given: one of previous president of South Korea, Park Gyuen Hye. During her term, there was a tragic accident and she was not good at being a control tower. After the accident, the media scrutinize all of her behavior of that day and it made public be upset to President, and finally the national Assembly voted for impeachment. Like this, media can do a role of proliferating one’s shortcoming and influence to public, thus it is hard for society to regard any living person as heroes.
However, there is other aspect of media; media can make living people as heroes. We live in the society where tools of communication is highly developed. Due to the worldwide fast cycle of news, social media, and new platforms such as Youtube or Facebook, people can get information much faster than ever. For example, Steve Jobs was one of role models and heroes of people before he died. He was pioneering of smart phone by combining internet with cell phone and he started his business based on design-based approach which was innovated in that times. In making him as a hero, media played a large role by focusing on his novelty and innovative thought. Mark Zukerberg and Bill Gate are also good instances that show the media’s impact on making a living hero.
To sum up, it is hard to pass judgement that it is no longer possible for a society to consider any living man or women as a role model because media’s reporting coverage is not only confined to shortcoming but also covers achievements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, thus, for example, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77411167513 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64724705648 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565989847716 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0265554084 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.5 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11111111111 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217488860386 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665301112739 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457955258171 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141429792979 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.022537229399 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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