Claim: It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero. 事实
Reason: The reputation of anyone who is subjected to media scrutiny will eventually be diminished.
The author asserts that it is no longer for a society to regard any living person as a hero because strict media scrutiny will finally diminish one’s reputation. However, I do not agree with the author’s idea. Admittedly, strict media coverage does reveal the flaws, stains and negative aspects of one hero, but the name of a real hero will never fade into oblivion.
Granted, the reason that the author presented is plausible that the increasing strict media scrutiny can more easily diminish a person’s population. This is because the flaws of a hero that the media disclosed, break the perfect image that the hero has shown to the public. Take the young singer Yuan Wang as an example. In the public’s eye, he is an energetic, handsome, talent and hard-working singer. Young children consider him as a role model and imitate his behaviors in many ways. Nonetheless, a recent media reportage revealed the negative aspect of Wang that he had illegally smoking in the indoor public space. After this media coverage, his positive image proved an illusion and all his fame has faded away. Therefore, the gradually strict media reportage unveils the multiple aspects of a hero, not only his or her virtues and strong points but also the drawbacks. The uncovered drawbacks will considerably blemish one hero’s image.
In contrast to diminish a hero’s population, media scrutiny also contributes to set up and broadcast a hero’s fame. Media sometimes serves to the public as a magnified glass through which the public can find and recognize anonymous hero who is silently doing noble things. Take the TV program Beautiful Mind (same name with the American film but not with the same content) as an example. This program that each year selects ten anonymous heroes, is like by the public of all ages and many civilian heroes has become well-known through this media platform. “Qingcao”, a group of young graduated students abandoned their high-paid works in cities and now is working in the remote mountain area as volunteer teachers. Chen Chen, a sixty-year-old grandfather, spent all his life in planting trees at the brink of the desert. There are still many anonymous heroes whose story is touching and inspiring, but most of them are unknown for the public. Nonetheless, the media reports unveiled these stories and spread them into a wider range.
Furthermore, real heroes will never diminish regardless of the media’s harshness, strictness and frequency. In the field of science, art and politics, it is replete with such examples. Yuming Pei, the world’s greatest architect, whose famous artwork is the Museum of Louvre, enjoyed a celebrity for forty years and is still receiving people’s respects. Students majoring in architecture regard him as a hero who bravely defend architecture’s culture meaning against the pure constructing techniques. Long Cheng, a modest and extremely hard-working actor, enjoyed a title as “Big Brother” because he is willing to help people and doing charity. Although he has made several mistakes while he was young, his charisma, warm heart and kindness make his population lasting for over thirty years. Guanzhong WU, a modest, diligent and talent artist, has devoted all his life in investigating the spirit of Chinese traditional art. Polished both by the public scrutiny and by the time, his reputation is growing stronger. These three examples adequately illustrate that real heroes’ reputation always get over through the media’s scrutiny.
In sum, increasingly strict and frequent media scrutiny does break the fake image of a hero and blemish his or her reputation, but real heroes will never fade into oblivion. Furthermore, the media coverage also discovers anonymous heroes and bring them into the public’s eye.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, therefore, well, while, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3257.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 611.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33060556465 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95101226784 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 325.0 215.323595506 151% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531914893617 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 1000.8 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0907054773 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.064516129 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7096774194 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90322580645 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193479785614 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552383030465 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644128217303 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135901433891 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565967245529 0.0667264976115 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 100.480337079 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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