94. The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well-being of that country's citizens.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
To assess a leader's achievement is becoming increasingly important not only for the public but also for leaders themselves. A precise and comprehensive evaluation standard can not only help the public to identify the most effective leader, but also help politicians to improve themselves. The author argues that the examination of well-being of the public is the best way to evaluate a leader. However, I think the well-being of the public is a concept too abstract and too ambiguous to be the best criterion. I think that the best way to measure a leader's effectiveness is to establish an evaluation system with multiple measurable criteria which can translate the public’s well-being as a whole into different measurable parts.
Some people may contend that the well-being of the public is the best indication of a leader's performance. First, this is because the well-being of the public is the ultimate goal for each politician. Leaders who elected by the public should devote themselves wholeheartedly to the public's welfare. Thus, it is reasonable to consider the well-being of the public, the ultimate purpose for politicians, as the best measurement. Second, compared with other measurements, the well-being of the public could represent most citizen's opinion regarding a leader's effectiveness. Other measurements, such as the achievements of elites, involving only a small group of people, are not representative for all citizens. However, in my opinion, the well-being of the public is not an applicable measurement to evaluate a leader's effectiveness. First, well-being is an abstract concept and consists of multiple aspects. Each individual has their own definition about well-being. Some people prioritize health in their lives, but others put money and powers at the first place. Furthermore, it is difficult to evaluate objectively the well-being of every individual, let alone to collect and analyze the well-being of 1.4 billion people in China. To conclude, although the well-being of the public seems like a crucial and reasonable measurement of a leader's effectiveness, in fact it remains theoretical best and inapplicable in reality.
To measure the effectiveness of a country's leader, we should consider other applicable criteria. In my opinion all criteria which can fulfill the listed two requirements can be considered as an effective measurement to evaluate a leader's accomplishment. First requirement is that the new criteria should reflect the well-being of the public as it is the ultimate goal of a country's leader. We are looking a group of criteria that each criterion represents an aspect of the public's well-being rather than looking for the only criterion equaling to the public's welfare. Second requirement is the measurability of the criteria and the accessibility to the data. For example, we can measure the citizens' living condition by analyzing the houses' prices, measure the job opportunities by analyzing the tax of unemployment, measure the cultural diversity by analyzing the number of museums and galleries. To conclude, although we cannot measure the public's well-being directly, we can measure the public's well-being indirectly by decomposing it into measurable parts, such as house affordability, job opportunity and education accessibility. Thus, a group of criteria , which can translate the immeasurable public well-being as a whole into several measurable parts, is needed to evaluate the effectiveness of a country's leader.
In sum, to evaluate the effectiveness of a country's leader by examining the public's well-being is unfeasible in reality as the public's well-being is an abstract and unmeasurable concept. Thus, the best way to thoroughly evaluate a politician's accomplishment is to establish an evaluation system with multiple measurable criteria which can reflect partly the public's well-being.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
To assess a leaders achievement is becoming increasingly im...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
... I think that the best way to measure a leaders effectiveness is to establish an evalua...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
... the public is the best indication of a leaders performance. First, this is because the...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...eing of the public could represent most citizens opinion regarding a leaders effectivene...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...esent most citizens opinion regarding a leaders effectiveness. Other measurements, such...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...an applicable measurement to evaluate a leaders effectiveness. First, well-being is an ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...crucial and reasonable measurement of a leaders effectiveness, in fact it remains theor...
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Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
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Suggestion: ,
...accessibility. Thus, a group of criteria , which can translate the immeasurable pu...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'politicians'' or 'politician's'?
Suggestion: politicians'; politician's
..., the best way to thoroughly evaluate a politicians accomplishment is to establish an evalu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, second, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 43.0 19.5258426966 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3278.0 2235.4752809 147% => OK
No of words: 594.0 442.535393258 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51851851852 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34579343856 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.380471380471 0.4932671777 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1033.2 704.065955056 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4675729137 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.407407407 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2962962963 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214254327963 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865184834183 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533193382347 0.0758088955206 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170873357721 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0174810880528 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.