Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When it comes to whether the rules that the society today expect young people to follow and obey are to strict, students and parents tend to have different points of views. Some youngsters think that they have to adjust themselves to more rigid societal regulations than youngsters in the past. However, I think that in some fields young people do enjoy more freedom, but in other fields young people do not.
First, today's society is more enlightened than the society before in terms of acceptance of LGBT groups. This acceptance gives young people more liberty in expressing love and choosing life-long partners. In the last century the LGBT groups were remaining in an extremely low profile and most of them were unknown for the public. The Chinese movie Lan Yu tells a love story between two boys in 1990. They were extremely fascinated by each other. They wrote love letters, sung songs and read books to each other. However, they could not announce their love publicly and finally both of them married with women. Another American movie Brokeback Mountains also demonstrates the difficulty for two gays to be together in last century. However, today ‘s LGBT group receives more social support and identity. For example, in many counties gay marriage is legal and protected by the law. Under these circumstances, young people have more liberty than before in choosing lovers.
Second, the relationship between children and parents is more equal today than before. In the past, children had a lower status in family, and their behaviors were strictly influenced by the society’s moral standards. They had to listen to parent’s orders and adjust their behaviors according to parents’ wishes. In contrast, children of today are regarded as an independent individual. In ancient China, every child had to adjust their behaviors according to an ethical standards handbook that listed all behaviors forbidden in front of elders. For example, young could not eat with parents at same table and could not look straight to parents’ eye as these two behaviors considered as challenges to parents’ authority. However, in modern people’s eye these rules are neither comprehensible nor acceptable. Today children are taken care and even pampered by parents and children can treat their parents as good friend. Under these circumstances, children today have less rules to follow when they communicate with parents.
However, not all aspects of society impose less limits on young people's behaviors. Young people have more liberty in private lives but have less freedom in works. Unlike ancestors of hunting and collecting society, who had a free working schedule and could devote more time to spouse and offspring, modern people are mostly office bound workers. Graduates who are entering in a new company and desiring to leave a good impression to their employers have to work extremely hard and practice a strict nine to nine work routine from Monday to Saturday. The intense competition of modern society imposes an invisible limit on young people's life. Young people have to follow some hidden rules such as working overtime automatically, giving gifts to bosses regularly, paying bills for clients actively etc. In a nutshell, modern young employees obey more unwritten rules than employees of the past.
All in all, the society is more enlightened than before regarding people's relationship, but the increasing intense competition imposes a stricter rule on young people's behaviors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'standards'' or 'standard's'?
Suggestion: standards'; standard's
...their behaviors according to an ethical standards handbook that listed all behaviors forb...
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Line 5, column 998, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun rules is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hese circumstances, children today have less rules to follow when they communicate w...
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Line 7, column 44, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun limits is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ever, not all aspects of society impose less limits on young peoples behaviors. Youn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, look, regarding, second, so, for example, i think, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2968.0 1977.66487455 150% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29055258467 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70653868634 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49376114082 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 906.3 618.680645161 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.7897439711 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7419354839 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0967741935 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58064516129 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20365353004 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574484571114 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631650881016 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133366542232 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0572444323479 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 86.8835125448 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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