Claim Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today Reason We are not able to make connections between current events and past events until we have some distance from both Write a response in which you discuss the extent to w

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Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today.
Reason: We are not able to make connections between current events and past events until we have some distance from both.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The advancement in any field be it; science, arts, business, law and order that we relish today has all been precursored by the past events. Past events are guide to the present and it has been like that since the begining of time. The prompt suggests that knowledge of past incident cannot help people at future to make important decision: reason being, as we are unable to make connections between current and past events until we have some distance from both. I strongly disagree, with the given statement for the following reasons.
Events at past has always been a percursor for future. We have learned from our mistakes and improvised, since begining of our existance. We can all imagine what would have happen if we had been following same procedure to achieve same failure cessation again and again. But, we thrive to change, to bring revolution only after we have learne d from our past. What would have happened, if scientist in past didnot improvised the ideas that were put forth by scientist before them. We would still be swindeling around with no success at hand. For an instance, lets say , a scientist at present is given to research at a random topic, which is still of his field but out of his forte, then he first thing he would do is go through the similar research that has been conducted in the past. Then, he would acquire knowledge of what is it or how it happens how to proceed and so on? THis is not just relevant to the science field it applicable in other multi-disciplanaries. In the field of music when there were just repetation similar composition: musicians like Morzart and Beethovin to Hans Zimmer has created the new symphony. Mathmathician have come up with new equations or have solved the unsolved eqations of the pasts. Enterpreneur today are more competitive then in past.
Furthermore, our society is dynamic: we are never at par. We keep on thriving to make change followed by numerous mistakes and amendments. In stone age, people use to eat whatever they like and whenever they like; when the population started to grow and food supply ebbed then the first domestic agriculture was started to reduce famine. This is us, human, we do mistakes we learn from then improvise the technique and sustain the procedure, until further amendments are needed. Similarly, in our Judicial system we learn from our past. No, constitution is perfect: it has many loop holes to which the criminal paly with. In Nepal, before mid 1970's the was law to prevent child marriage- to protect women rights.But, later in 2011 child marriage or any kind of physical relation with the girl below age of 16 was named illigal and accused had to face 10 years in prison. See, we did something wrong in past, we had urge to wright the wrong and we corrected the wrong learning from our past.
In conclusion, some might argue, that past information cannot be applicabe at present but learning from the past has always help human kind to evolve and come at a better conclusion as aforementioned.

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Average: 5.9 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 173, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...nce. We can all imagine what would have happen if we had been following same procedure...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... What would have happened, if scientist in past didnot improvised the ideas that...
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Line 2, column 568, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ccess at hand. For an instance, lets say , a scientist at present is given to rese...
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Line 2, column 1265, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...Enterpreneur today are more competitive then in past. Furthermore, our society is d...
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Line 2, column 1270, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...preneur today are more competitive then in past. Furthermore, our society is dynamic: ...
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Line 3, column 160, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...es and amendments. In stone age, people use to eat whatever they like and whenever ...
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Line 3, column 712, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...child marriage- to protect women rights.But, later in 2011 child marriage or any ki...
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Line 3, column 899, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
... in prison. See, we did something wrong in past, we had urge to wright the wrong and we...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...t but learning from the past has always help human kind to evolve and come at a bett...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, similarly, so, still, then, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76099426386 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64274048446 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533460803059 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9469899161 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.92 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339221076091 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944144000375 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112274517336 0.0758088955206 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233154486767 0.150359130593 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125594241141 0.0667264976115 188% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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