Claim: Scholastic art and music programs are so important that the government should fund those
programs in schools that cannot afford them.
Reason: Students who study art and music are more likely to succeed than those who do not.
Art is an important aspect of human life.It helps you to create ,imagine and articulate beyond reality.It helps us to process our emotions which helps us to stabilize mental health. Music have different genres and beats for different occasions.Music has the power which can help a person troubles.Music and art are juxtapose with one another.Musicians who create music have the artistic skills to portrays as well.
Firstly, students must take their career paths to educational purposes. As it finds a way for a person to survive in this competitive world.This will help students to grow thinking ability of what is beneficial in future. There are quite handful of people who are successful in the art and music industry. If a student is educated and skillful he can get a job anywhere in the world.
Secondly,art and music can only make a person imaginative and not pragmatic. If a business is to be conducted, the person should have analytical and practical solutions rather than being imaginative. There are quite successful people who have not studied art but yet they are successful .For example, Bill Gates is one of the most successful entrepreneur. He succeeded because of his incisive idea. This is just one example but there are several others which show us that art and music are not related to success of a person.
Although educating yourself is important, it is not necessarily the reason of their success. Government should fund art and music to every school. It will help them with extracurricular activities to explore every aspect of their life’s. Art and music are heart and soul of most human beings. Students should not be left behind just because their school could not pay for the program.
In conclusion, I believe that government should fund art and music programs at schools that are unable to afford them. The children at underfunded schools by no means should be left behind compared to the students at a rich school. The government must ensure that all children get equal opportunities to learn and grow. Although art and music help in developing our emotional intelligence, they are not the cause of a person’s success. Success depends on a lot of external and internal factors and music, art may not be the direct factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1885.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97361477573 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8696136148 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509234828496 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.0891695917 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7619047619 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0476190476 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313699357365 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104531469169 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0971849278423 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179253217174 0.150359130593 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0659187542539 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.