Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The surest metric of a great country is not the coups of its rulers, artists or scholars, rather it is the well-being of all its citizens which is the definate indicator. That is the speaker's contention, and I tend to hold the center ground regarding the topic. To my way of thinking, both of the indicators mentioned in the speaker's claim and its reason have some degree of merit to be taken into account as deciding elements. The following essay will outline my take on the subject at hand.
To begin with, I disagree with the claim that the achievements of a nation's leaders, artists or scientists cannot be regarded as a reliable indicator to assess the greatness of the nation. What I believe is that a country's rulers or the erudite are actually members of a society. Their greatness and efficacy can considerably impact the nation where they are living in either the short or long run. By way of illustration, the USA is known as a country housing some of the most prominent figures human history has ever witnessed such as Thomas Edison. It seems unfair to me that one decides to ignore the influence of such noteworthy people on the greatness of America. Similarly, in music industry there have been so many top-notch artists living in the USA who helped making a particular genre to develop and become known globally. The late great singer Elvis Presley seems to be a meet instance for that matter, whose works remarkably assisted the Rock and Roll music. In short, the speaker's claim appears to be incapable of considering a crucial aspect of the current issue, in that it ignores the defining roles of some important men and women of a nation whose greatness can in fact inform their country's magnificence as a whole.
Having made these points, however, the level of a country's overall well-being seems to be another suitable factor to measure its greatness. In this day and age, improving the general populace's welfare has been one of the highest priorities of any governments or political leaders. To the best of my knowledge, throughout the human history one of the most trusted indicators to assess a nation's greatness has been the welfare of its residents. A simple look at the greatest countries in the globe would reveal the fact that almost all of them enjoy a characteristic called accpetable level of welfare among the general population. Nations such as England, Germany and France which are thought to be some of the great nations on earth all possess a rather palatable degree with which their dwellers are provided with welfare. Hence, looking at the current pattern among some of the wealthiest and greatest nations in the world, one can confidently deduce that the reason presented by the speaker would deserve to be paid equal attention just as the antithesis of his/her claim.
On balance, I feel that one cannot irrefutably assert that the most effective metric for assessing the greatness of a country is the welfare of all its people. While such factor plays a significant role in deciding the greatness of a nation, there are still other telling factors such as the achievements of a country's notable figures for that matter.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... is the definate indicator. That is the speakers contention, and I tend to hold the cent...
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...line my take on the subject at hand. To begin with, I disagree with the claim...
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Suggestion: to make; make
...ch artists living in the USA who helped making a particular genre to develop and becom...
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...ir countrys magnificence as a whole. Having made these points, however, the l...
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...the most trusted indicators to assess a nations greatness has been the welfare of its r...
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...many and France which are thought to be some of the great nations on earth all possess a ra...
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... as the antithesis of his/her claim. On balance, I feel that one cannot irref...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, look, regarding, similarly, so, still, well, while, i feel, in fact, in short, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2627.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84686346863 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66740220392 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490774907749 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 704.065955056 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1666637832 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.35 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311405028229 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087937361643 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799374680177 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189532327451 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273347619658 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 100.480337079 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.