Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The subject of governments financially aiding the arts seems to have polarised those who are fascinated to voice their take on it. On the one hand, some support the opinion that such governmental funding is necessary to guarantee the success and the availability of the arts to the public. On the other hand, it is sometimes argued that government financing of the arts endangers the integrity of the arts. My notion on the matter is in a closer harmony with the latter mainly because the type of government and the potential lack of artistic judgement by authorities can in fact imperil the integrity of the arts.
When it comes to the kind government that is willing to allocate a portion of its budget to promoting the arts, it is always the risk of politicising things. Such trend can be felt more remarkably when a dictatorial regime decides to financially assist the arts. Experience suggests that in most such cases, if not all, the sole purpose of political leaders in alloting their financial resources is helping with reconstructing their damaged reputation through the years of dictatorship among the public. Documentaries and promotional films are two favourite artistic realms of authoritarian politicians who have a tendency to exploit their influences on the public. In short, such government funding of the arts does threaten the honesty of the arts.
What is more, government officials are mostly people with a lack of artistic sense with the result that they might be incapable of properly prioritising the governmental funds when it comes to artistic matters. It is true that in some democratic nations such authorities are actually knowledgeable folks in terms of the arts. Admittedly, in most parts of the globe, especially where oppressive regimes are ruling, top leaders choose the art department's authorities based on their political attitudes, regardless of their ability to make good artistic judgements. One of the evident ramifications of the above-mentioned trend in political leaders is that government's fiscal aids are unfairly granted to those works of art lacking the true merit of enjoying them, while so many high quality works may be deliberately ignored for reasons other than artistic and technical ones. Thus, the second problem with government funding of the arts is the potential lack of artistic knowledge from the authorities which may put the integrity of the arts at risk.
On balance, I feel that government funding of the arts does more harm than good, considering the possible threats imposed to the integrity of the arts by authoritarian rulers' disposition to misuse the arts for their personal gains. Further, experience suggests that there is always the danger of allocating government's funds in an unjust fashion to low-quality works of art by unsophisticated politicians who account for the majority of the heads of countries' art departments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, if, may, second, so, thus, while, i feel, in fact, in short, it is true, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20726495726 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01405609022 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487179487179 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 761.4 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.0207124159 60.3974514979 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.3125 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.125 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367673071811 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133844997383 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103147770783 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245153282479 0.150359130593 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785202476179 0.0667264976115 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.8420337079 86% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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