I generally agree with the speaker’s claim that learning about the historical past requires creativity based on two reasons: many times no documentation of the history is available at all, and other times what we have is usually a mix of information which requires creativity to solve the puzzle.
Like Oscar Wilde, the famous Irish-born writer in the 18th century had once said: “history is merely gossip”, the past is truly full of adventures. In fact, the word history comes from the ancient Greek for “story”. Historians work like detectives, they gather evidences, search for lost treasures, and put everything together in an effort. For example, how the dinosaurs extinct was still a myth and numerous scientists had suggested different explanations. Since there was no human beings during the time and certainly no forms of documents available, the scientists have to search for fossils and bones in order to imagine what the earth was like back then. Another example would be Darwin’s “theory of evolution”, which is largely based on conjecture as well.
Additionally, in many cases only subjective pieces of information were available, thus in order to learn the truth, historian were required to have a certain degree of creative thinking and meticulous analysis. Just as Joachim Peiper, a well-known captain from World War two, had once said: “history is written by the victor, only those experienced know the truth.” And reflect on the history of ancient China, when the emperors started a new dynasty, usually the first thing they do was to burn all the history documents and to kill the historiographers, followed by rewriting what had happen in order to glorify their actions. On the other hand, sometimes only diaries or second-hand evidence were survived. Therefore, in an effort to know what had truly happened, historians were required to combine pieces of information together, add connections here and there, and even entirely overturn certain subjective evidence.
In summary, although history is often considered to be objective, it is never merely about facts. Creativity is required to learn about the past and to figure out what had truly happened, every new piece of information could possible overturn the what had been previously considered to be the truth.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 598, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
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Line 4, column 598, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'happened'.
Suggestion: happened
...raphers, followed by rewriting what had happen in order to glorify their actions. On t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, in fact, in summary, in many cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 33.0505617978 24% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35230352304 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09075709661 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569105691057 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.0826485704 60.3974514979 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.923076923 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3846153846 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1538461538 5.21951772744 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124255971217 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448997110982 0.0831039109588 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542188873896 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0994654903363 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657631102222 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.8971910112 139% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.7820224719 153% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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