The author asserts that young people's lack of thier development of social skills because extensice use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets lead young users to form artifical personalities and relationships online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them. There is no denying there is some aspect of hurting their development of social skills, however, it may not be true in all circumstances.
Admittedly, it is easy to see several instances in our reality that show problems caused by use of portable devices, especially in using of a smartphone which makes people access on the internet in everywhere at everytime. For instances, cyber bullying is one of the major problems between young people who use portable devices. Victims are usally suffer from teasing by peers who are using their social network service to upload shameful posts or photos on victim's SNS account and quickly erasing those posts before someone accuse of them. This cyble bullying and hostile comments on someone's news article or social network accounts may occur because of the anonimous characteristics of the internet and by using of portable devices which make people more easy to access the internet. Like this, it seems plausible that young people are losing thier social skills.
However, it seems difficult to agree with the author in full because there are benefits to the opposing positions. For exmaple, portable devices like smartphones and tablets have changed dramatically our way of communication, enabling not only young people but also us to keep touch with each other more frequently despite of obstacle such as long distance or differenct time. Due to this technologies, new etiquette to communicate in online community occured and although it will take some times for young people to learn about this etiquette, but it do not mean that they could not develop social skills at all. Thus, problems that the author points out could be settled down by educating young people and the use of portable devices have several advantages.
Moreover, even if young people prefer to being make thier artificial personalities and relationships online rather then fully honestly engaging with the people around them, however, it may not the lasting situation. Because of rapid cycle of information and advent of several platforms of social networking such as instagram and Facebook, it is hard for young people to sustain their hishonest personalities even in online. If a young person posts on fake facts or untruth scandals on their account, it would be detected by his or her peers right away because it is very easy to find out the validity or truthness of information uploaded on online. Thus, althought it is possible to make fake personalities but it would last forever because of development of technology.
Consquently, the claim that young people have little skills of social communication because of portable devices is plausible to some degree but it may not be true if the author take consideration about several advantages of development of technology and newly emerging culture of online etiqutte. Thus, it is better choice to take balanced approach about the decision of young people's social skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...r than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them. There is no denying there is some aspe...
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Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'accuses'.
Suggestion: accuses
...ckly erasing those posts before someone accuse of them. This cyble bullying and hostil...
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Line 3, column 587, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'someones'' or 'someone's'?
Suggestion: someones'; someone's
... cyble bullying and hostile comments on someones news article or social network accounts...
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Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ong distance or differenct time. Due to this technologies, new etiquette to communic...
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Line 5, column 553, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'does'?
Suggestion: does
...e to learn about this etiquette, but it do not mean that they could not develop so...
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Line 7, column 42, Rule ID: PREFER_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...oreover, even if young people prefer to being make thier artificial personalities and...
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Line 7, column 116, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...alities and relationships online rather then fully honestly engaging with the people...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...ather then fully honestly engaging with the people around them, however, it may not the lasting situat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, honestly, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2726.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21223709369 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76223601997 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474187380497 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 865.8 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.8306460222 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.352941176 118.986275619 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7647058824 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350895925085 0.243740707755 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117699775164 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723074300983 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217804503236 0.150359130593 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740102758552 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 14.1392134831 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 48.8420337079 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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