Claim Young people s tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills Reason These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than ful

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Claim: Young people's tendency to make extensive use of portable devices like smartphones and tablets has hurt their development of social skills.

Reason: These devices encourage users to form artificial personalities and relationships online rather than fully and honestly engaging with the people around them.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

This statement and the reasoning given is very broad and generalized, which, I agree to a certain extent, though not entirely. Without doubt, young people's ever increasing use of the latest devices and social media applications has somewhat impaired their social skills; it is backed by much research evidence on different populations in varying social contexts. But, the pandemic also demonstrates that technology and its' latest applications and those persons who possess deft skills and focused use, have benefited from it. The more emotionally intelligent personalities whose identities are relatively developed along with their cognitive and inter personal skills will be able to balance technology with real life interaction. Therefore, it seems to me that young adults need to learn how to manage different inter personal relationship demands and contexts in both the real and virtual worlds.

Continuing from the above paragraph, emerging devices which possess ever improving characteristics facilitate increasing communication: indeed,it is true that many young people are actually forming artificial virtual personalities and devoting more effort towards cultivating online personas. More so, especially as the pandemic exacerbates greater use of videoconferencing tools - meetings, classroom lessons and projects, etc. are being done real time, concomitantly as the youth forget their old routines of doing daily commutes to and from work and university campuses. Nevertheless, despite these emerging trends, many young men and women still acquire other social skills which they would otherwise not have cultivated in real life environments. Take for example, a small business that relies on selling cyber security software; an inexperienced call center worker in an offshore location who would not be otherwise employed, speaking to clients all over the world as well as the head office. Technology, therefore facilitates valuing diversity in employment and more varied interactions, all contributing towards nurturing social skills among younger age groups.

A virtual presence or social media use, perhaps indiscriminately, fosters artificial relationships. As artificial intelligence evolves along with immersive virtual environments, opportunities will grow for real life simulations. Young persons can nurture social skills just as they would in the real world; virtual reality headsets and augmented reality combines with three dimensional spaces which will increase inter personal interactions. Just as there will be business opportunities, so too would there be new ways of learning things. Lab experiments or architectural projects can also be done in the new meta verse. Moreover, educators and parents also share some responsibility for coaxing young men and women back into the real world: they could use certain incentives and reinforcements which urge children and youth towards outdoor trips, camping activities or even just getting them off their smartphones.

Technological advancements and its’ proliferating applications is only here to stay. Many habits and routines which younger age people have adopted especially during the pandemic is unlikely to wither away completely. It seems then, the challenge is creating new opportunities for cultivating social and technological skills, especially during profound change. The youth, educators and their parents share the burden of encouraging youngsters from early ages towards responsible technology uses, social media as well as social responsibility. The important idea is coaxing them to discover more about themselves, try new things and to just be themselves. It is perfectly possible for them to have digital avatars and virtual experiences but also to participate in the real world just as there are laws, policies and ethics which need to harness the opportunities in both worlds.

In conclusion, younger age groups are losing social skills due to proliferating technologies, emerging applications and new, though not necessarily good habits. But then, there are also increasing opportunities for cultivating social skills, these are either primarily in the real or virtual worlds or it straddles both. A lot depends on a person, the prevailing context and his capacities; the youth need to seek social interaction but the burden of shared responsibilities among different groups often implies that they need to be coaxed to do it. Nonetheless, only if indiscriminate technology uses are taken to extremes then would they lose their respective social skills. Technological applications will grow, will increase and these young men and women need to balance various considerations.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , it
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Message: An apostrophe is never used to form possessive case pronouns. Did you mean: 'its'?
Suggestion: its
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 39.0 14.8657303371 262% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3989.0 2235.4752809 178% => OK
No of words: 691.0 442.535393258 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77279305355 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12707312764 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16973995963 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 361.0 215.323595506 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522431259045 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 1233.9 704.065955056 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.8263892959 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.464285714 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6785714286 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179617371198 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487610823049 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431488286153 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111393992815 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047675171767 0.0667264976115 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.8420337079 62% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.1639044944 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 191.0 100.480337079 190% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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