College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Choosing the field of one’s studies is an important decision to make in one’s life. In fact, one has to compare and contrast many factors until coming to making up their mind. The prompt recommends that students should consider the availability of jobs on the field they choose. In my opinion, I disagree with this suggestion and argue that students should choose what they like first and then what carries premises to find a job in the future. This can be explained for a couple of reasons.
Firstly, when choosing a field of study, one is long term thinking and this makes it very decisive for his/her future. Thus, this big choice should be something favorite and pleasant to do. For example, some people choose what they will study for since they are young after getting inspired in different ways. For example, some like to become teachers, after spending with them many years and some others like to be astronauts because space attracts them. However, they might change their mind due to job availabilities, but still choosing something they are found of to pursue. Consequently, it is not easy to change the field of studies halfway or completely from the beginning because its time and effort consuming.
Further, even if we assume that choosing something we like is not important and time might shift the way different jobs stand compared to each other, one should still pursue his/her dreams and study something that lights up inside them. Research has shown that people that followed their heart had better experiences in their life regarding their work history and job experiences. In other words, it is helpful sticking to one’s dreams and passions because is rewarding. Thus, our parents who chose to be teachers or doctors earned maybe not so much money ,but they are respected and satisfied for what they have done.
Lastly, some argue that in our increasingly globalized economy choosing the highest rated fields of study is very present lately and students might make regrettable choices thus, it is very imperative to look inside oneself. If they do so, they are likely to succeed and get a nice job due to skills and passion about that job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
... choosing a field of study, one is long term thinking and this makes it very decisiv...
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Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t and time might shift the way different jobs stand compared to each other, one s...
^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r doctors earned maybe not so much money ,but they are respected and satisfied for...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus, as to, for example, in fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 368.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90217391304 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43878262265 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546195652174 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.198048748 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.117647059 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 5.21951772744 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167623521262 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625195226048 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477553758475 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116070619107 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04560696232 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 54, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
... choosing a field of study, one is long term thinking and this makes it very decisiv...
^^^^
Line 3, column 115, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t and time might shift the way different jobs stand compared to each other, one s...
^^
Line 3, column 556, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...r doctors earned maybe not so much money ,but they are respected and satisfied for...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, thus, as to, for example, in fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1804.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 368.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90217391304 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43878262265 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546195652174 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.198048748 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.117647059 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35294117647 5.21951772744 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167623521262 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625195226048 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477553758475 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116070619107 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04560696232 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.