College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
From an early age we are all told to follow the compass of our heart towards a fulfilling career. That our passion will reward us and our loved ones. However, they fail to mention that love is not a panacea when it comes to financial responsibilities. While a logical person would agree that following one’s captivating joys is a no-brainer. The notion that college students should pursue their interests rather than practical in demand courses is precarious because of the detrimental effects on their future finances. At best, there should be a balance between courses that will lead to employment and those which are pure interest.
For one thing, college tuition is at its apex and student debt surpassed credit card debt for the first time in history. Attending college for interest activities is not a sagacious choice. On the contrary, if the probability of employment is low and debt is acquired. Well, this will just put more strain on our current high student debt crisis affecting every member of our society. While it may be true that financial aid and scholarships can mitigate this issue, the reality is that most students rely on private loans to attend college.
Furthermore, students from a low socioeconomic status are already dealing with financial problems. It is vital for these students to secure employment after graduation. Many have sacrificed all their resources to attain a college degree. Especially, many who are first time college students and are dealing with uncharted waters. For this reason, it is crucial to pursue courses with higher chances of leading to a job. However, it is also imperative to produce a well-balanced student with knowledge on various disciplines. The more educated a citizen the more well off a country will be. So, I would recommend that practical courses be the main emphasis of a student’s curriculum with room for electives. Much like the way grade schools operate.
In addition, we must take into consideration that not all students excel in classes that correlate with high employment. For example, disciplines like science and math can be difficult to become adept at. In this circumstance, we cannot simply discourage a student from seeking their interests due to lack of job probability. No one can predict the future, as to guarantee that their degree interest will not lead to a job. In contrast, there are many people who have made a decent living off their interests. For instance, Bill Gates a maverick who dropped out of college to follow his passion for computers in its nascent stage.
Finally, the best route that I have experienced is to pursue courses that will lead to employment. Where you can maintain a decent wage to preclude you from falling into the claws of student debt. Once, this safety net has been acquired then you can pursue those elective courses. For example, I was able to complete my engineering degree and pay off my student loans. That gave me the opportunity to return to college and follow my interest in studying music.
In conclusion, while it is reasonable to follow interests that spark your heart it is not always certain that those passions will lead to financial stability. This reflects in today’s student debt crisis. The best approach is to underscore courses that have the highest probability of producing a job with a modicum focus on electives to not feel distant from one’s passions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...it comes to financial responsibilities. While a logical person would agree that follo...
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...falling into the claws of student debt. Once, this safety net has been acquired then...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, for one thing, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2854.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 569.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0158172232 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75307879666 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513181019332 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 889.2 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0445327025 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.9411764706 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7352941176 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32352941176 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251565748022 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058982062577 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490897809777 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130012114009 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041963300892 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 100.480337079 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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