College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
I agree with the statement that college students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Culture outstanding professional of certain fields, such as history or economics. Take my friend, John, as an example. When he was an undergraduate, he majored in computer science at the National Taiwan University. This college encouraged their students to study some courses that interest them deeply. Therefore, John attended a good deal of courses, such European history, and American Politics. He could learn lots of intriguing knowledge in these courses, such as the rise and fall of the Great British Empire, which had an huge impact on Europe greatly. Furthermore, he also studied some political issues, like the problem of inflation in the United States, which had a serious influence on America. By these professional classes from different departments, he could understand lots of issues outside computer science and combine this knowledge with his major. After he graduated from National Taiwan University, John worked in a software company named HTB. In this enterprise, he mainly engaged in some artificial intelligence projects, such as using an NLP model to classify news. In the meantime, he could utilize many historical or political knowledge to improve his model and raise the accuracy rate from 50 percent to 90 percent . By contrast, if he hadn’t learn these professional knowledge in the college, he might have not be able to accomplish this artificial intelligence model.
Some people may claim that people should have a stable job to maintain their lives because they will need lots of money to pay for daily supplies or electric bills. They claim that with some promising professions, such as doctor or lawyer, people could lead a superior life, purchasing a sports car, such as Porsche 718, or savoring some delicacies. However, not each person will be willing to become a doctor or a lawyer because such occupations will need to bear many burdensome responsibilities. Doctors will need to take care of many patients with carefulness and highly excellent medicine. Moreover, doctors will also have to face medical disputes because they must be at risk of surgery failure. Only when people study the courses which greatly intrigue them they will go all out. As a result, choosing the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs may not be an optimal choice for most students.
Nevertheless, for students who aren’t finding their own interests yet, the college can guide these students to attend some courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs. Take National Cheng Kung University as an example. In 2021, this university began to provide some semiconductor-relevant courses for college students, such as integrated circuit design, which could offer students with lots of highly practical semiconductor technology. These students could acquire lots of interview opportunities, such as TSMC or Media Tek, which are top-notch businesses in the entire world, after they graduated from the college. As a result, most students could learn lots of professional knowledge, such as music or art, which they are interested in. Besides, other students can have many superb chances to get into the world-class enterprises to earn enough money to lead a satisfying life. On the top of that, both of them can have a bright future.
To sum up, the college can offer lots of intriguing courses to most students. Moreover, the college can also provide some functional courses for other students. Thus, they can obtain appropriate curriculum design for themselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a
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Message: Did you mean 'hadn’t learned', 'hadn’t learnt'?
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'job'.
Suggestion: job
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, of course, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3076.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 589.0 442.535393258 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22241086587 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.92639038232 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8511759419 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 289.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490662139219 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 944.1 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.6442232172 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.533333333 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6333333333 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.43333333333 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289062640248 0.243740707755 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081079313798 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.154128147678 0.0758088955206 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25449189274 0.150359130593 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.263066019306 0.0667264976115 394% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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