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The government should focus more on improving the Internet or public transportation system?

Both the Internet and public transportation system are necessary for our daily life in modern-day society. This will raise the question of whether the government should focus more on improving the Internet or public transportation system. In my opinion, I hold the belief that the government should spend more valuable resources on constructing public transportation system.

First of all, the government should focus more on improving the public transportation system because this kind of construction can be only provided by the government rather than a private company. Take Formosa Freeway, for instance, this highway spanned a vast area of Taiwan and faced plenty of practical problems. Therefore, this construction needed many government departments to coordinate each detail, such as the transportation agency and economic agency. For one thing, the traffic agency would need to handle the engineering issues, such as construction materials or traffic routes design. For another thing, the economic agency would evaluate the entire budget of this public transportation system carefully to utilize the budget efficiently. By contrast, there will be no other institutes that could carry out this complex project completely except the government. Moreover, many private companies could provide customers with the perfect Internet service, such as Taiwanese Telecommunications and AT&T.

Second, the government should focus more on improving the public transportation system because the public transportation system is a daily basic need for the public. For example, Taipei city is a busy and crowded place, and we will spend more money on taking taxis or uber. Therefore, many people will rather choose to take the Taipei MRT as an economical means for the commute. Before Taipei MRT was constructed, lots of people could only drive a car to commute, and they would also be upset about the daily traffic jam in Taipei every morning. As a result, the Taipei government chose to establish a public transportation system in 1995 to solve this traffic issue. Nowadays, everyone in Taipei could enjoy the convenience brought by Taipei MRT instead of being bothered by a severe traffic jam. In contrast, the Internet isn’t the most urgent requirement for the public. If we lose the Internet in a short period, we will just receive a smaller negative effect than losing the public transportation system.

To sum up, these are the two reasons why I take the position that the government should focus more on the public transportation system. On one hand, the public transportation system could only be always provided by the government. On the other hand, the public transportation system is a daily basic need for most people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... in modern-day society. This will raise the question of whether the government should focus more on imp...
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Line 5, column 367, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e Taipei MRT as an economical means for the commute. Before Taipei MRT was constructed, lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, another thing, for example, for instance, in contrast, kind of, such as, as a result, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 9.8082437276 224% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 8.0752688172 384% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2307.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36511627907 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9997845605 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460465116279 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.1982725875 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.857142857 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4761904762 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8095238095 5.45110844103 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.532979149222 0.236089414692 226% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193591119359 0.076458572812 253% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.208281031553 0.0737576698707 282% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.430947657861 0.150856017488 286% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.152308675563 0.0645574589148 236% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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