Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
As the competition of job market is becoming more and more rapid, even recent graduates are required to have working experience relevant to their target working. According to this contemporary situation, universities and colleges are considering to provide additional fieldwork in real companies so that their students could fit the society earlier. From my point of view, such an implementation is reasonable and even practical to some extent, yet it should also take other factors such as students' majors into consideration.
To begin with, there is no doubt that training outside school would benefit them a lot, especially for students engaging into engineering disciplines. The functions of colleges are somewhat limited, since most of the time, students need only listen to lectures and finish homework, but fieldwork is an indispensable part for students in order to truly understand the underlying principles of engineering subjects and prepare for their future careers. Northeast University in USA, taken as an example, requires every student to take participation in a wide range of working outside school during their summer vacation. After graduation, a large percentage of graduates highly recommend this kind of teaching method as it is conducive for their job prospects and some of them even got the formal offers from the firms they used to work before. To sum up, when it comes to job opportunities, working outside the academic world would be greatly helpful for graduates.
Nevertheless, spending too much time outside schools would backfire for students from other faculty. To be specific, real work is not a short period as students have to leave school for months, and thereby they could not concentrate on their academic work or even scientific researches. This could be more severe for students majoring in subjects regarding pure science. Firstly, the features and traits of these subjects determine that scientific researches would be better processed in school labs, so if students have to work outside school, these experiments are more likely to be postponed. Besides, unlike engineering subjects, science subjects are not too vocational, which is to say, it doesn’t necessarily mean that students have to find jobs after graduation but could stay in school and continue researching afterwards. In short, not all faculty has to set up fieldwork outside school, since it is not that necessary for science subjects and might undermine scientific processes.
In conclusion, it is not easy to evaluation the necessity of fieldwork for university students since it could be extremely helpful for students majoring in engineering subjects and targeting at future job opportunities, while it is not a requisite for those engaging in other science subjects. From my perspective, whether it should be add to curriculum or not should mainly depends on subjects and students’ willingness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'added'?
Suggestion: added
...om my perspective, whether it should be add to curriculum or not should mainly depe...
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Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
... add to curriculum or not should mainly depends on subjects and students' willingn...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, while, as to, in conclusion, in short, kind of, no doubt, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2470.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41666666667 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00603105172 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517543859649 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 759.6 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.082105281 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.375 118.986275619 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.21951772744 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168750673232 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654458852672 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0300422576886 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107168387471 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290123741122 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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