Colleges and universities should require their students to spend at least one semester studying in a foreign country.
The opportunities provided by universities today have been copious. The availability of foreign exchange programs has enabled students to bag study opportunities on the other side of the world alongside their university degree. The prompt recommends colleges and universities to make semester-long foreign exchange programs mandatory for incoming students. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that students should not be compelled to opt for this program for two reasons.
To begin, it might not be possible for certain students to leave their hometown. Thus, imposing a foreign exchange program on these students forcefully would be a major concern from their perspective. For instance, if a student suffers from a medical condition that requires her to visit their doctor on a weekly basis to receive medical treatment, she runs the risk of relying on an unfamiliar doctor and receiving untrustworthy medical treatment from a foreign hospital. Not only is doctor reliability the issue here, but she may also be incorrectly treated with the foreign doctor misconstruing the translated medical records. The above example illustrates that promulgating a semester in a foreign country as a mandate would produce a paramount issue for a specific group of students. Necessity eclipses the importance of education. This decision might backfire, and block specific students from pursuing a university degree entirely.
Further, even if we assume that it is physically possible for all students to relocate internationally for one semester, it might be a hindrance to one’s career goals. For instance, if a student has been pursuing a research project at his university, he might only be able to pursue it when physically present at the university’s research lab. Publishing a research paper of his work in an estimable journal would require several semesters of persistent research. This publication is a requirement for certain reputable research positions, which he might be motivated to make the cut for. However, if he is forced to relocate for a semester abroad, his research would have to be put to a pause, and his career goal of diving into research might take a hit. Thus, as demonstrated in the above example, spending an entire semester abroad, that makes up for a major chunk of one’s college education, might not always be the wisest decision analogous to one’s career ambitions. By restricting future opportunities for students in this manner, the diversity of opportunities pursued from the college would also take a significant cut.
Of course, some argue that in our increasingly globalised economy, students would develop qualities and receive exposure that is integral to making career choices. However, isn’t making this a mandate making one’s career choices more parochial? And at what cost are we willing to compel students to pursue so? By providing students with the option of pursuing a semester abroad, one can opt to do so at their one will. One can opt to do so if it would be in line with their career ambitions. One can opt to do so if it would not be a major inconvenience. At this precocious age, people should be motivated to follow their inner voices. Passing mandates only restricts one’s true potential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 229, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2760.0 2235.4752809 123% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23719165085 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00750812475 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470588235294 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4145476937 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.153846154 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2692307692 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96153846154 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307448192321 0.243740707755 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880711612484 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549701299853 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188493061092 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025038810093 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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