Monitoring and surveillance conducted across the organisation is a factor that every organisation relies on. For better maintaining, the statistics of dealings, a organisation maintains over the years. The routine check of the employee e-mail and the correspondence is essential to maintain the check and insights of all transactions every employee does. The very monitored data can be used to protect and estimate the system resources and capabilities efficiently. I strongly support the argument that the routine monitoring of employees should be done for system capacity estimates and protection of any lawsuits for the following two reasons.
To begin, by the statistical data based on the routine monitoring we can precisely estimate the resources and system capacity to deal with the deficit or the superfluous requirements. For instance, a entity with an intention to expand the business abroad, can reliably estimate the resources and the system capacities, so that, the required investment can be precisely estimated. Also, the system malfunction or the over-consumption of resources can be easily sensed and required actions can be taken to deal with the problem. The above example illustrates the importance of routine monitoring and the decision can be taken to particularly access the problems and requirements.
Secondly, the monitoring activities are very much essential these days to beep-up the security as any system is vulnerable to the any outside/inside attacks that includes spoofing, collusion and hacking he system. For example, recently Microsoft was able to identity the flaws and the vulnerability in their operating system of Win 7 just by routine monitoring the system under different circumstances. This example proves that the routine monitoring is the essential part of the organisation to deal with cyber threats.
Some may argue that routine monitoring the employee requires additional resources and serves no purpose but an overhead. however, the loss we incur if we do not do the routine monitoring in 10 folds more than doing the monitoring. Lawsuits , cyber attacks , under performed system can eat your resources slowly and soon at large affordable. Therefore, monitoring is the essential activity of a organisation to keep up with all the threats and estimating the resources efficiently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'essentially'?
Suggestion: essentially
...the monitoring activities are very much essential these days to beep-up the security as a...
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...to deal with cyber threats. Some may argue that routine monitoring the employee re...
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Suggestion: However
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...more than doing the monitoring. Lawsuits , cyber attacks , under performed system ...
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Suggestion: ,
...the monitoring. Lawsuits , cyber attacks , under performed system can eat your res...
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...monitoring is the essential activity of a organisation to keep up with all the th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5251396648 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2039279519 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508379888268 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2988894458 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.625 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263478060946 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978443427895 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518733350119 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172761674491 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574232573442 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.8420337079 66% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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