Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
“Learning and competition: two sides of a coin”. In the world of cupidity, sophistication and desire to make an impact in the chosen field, learning and competition are complementary. However, the prompt asserts the contrasting relationship between competitions for high grades that limits the learning in education. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the prompt and argue that competition for high grades must be the urging factor to reach at pinnacle of learning. The following paragraphs delineate the reasons for my opinion.
To begin with, the field of finance and economics or perhaps the field where the focus is on money, banking and finance, continuous urge to achieve high grade is obligatory since the research shows that students who perform well in academics are likely to become an expert of economics and finance. For instance, Dr. Raghu Rajan consistently performed well in his academics, achieved first rank in undergraduate degree, awarded the President Medal for outstanding academics, top scorer in GRE and highest scorer in his Ph.D. Owing to his desire to achieve high grades, he could learn the nuances of finance and became the person who predicted the world financial crises. Further, Dr. Viral who also was a top scorer in his engineering degree and a topper of GRE and TOEFL substantiated his eager to achieve the highest honor, he was awarded the best student in his Ph.D. Here also, his competition for grades made him the scholar who learned the systemic risk of a banking system. Both these examples show that competition for grades follow the learning. It matters because learning comes after attaining the high grades.
Secondly, the field of management as well requires high grades that can validate the passion of a person to learn changing business environment. For instance, the former CEO of Pepsi, Ms. Indira Nooyi was widely acknowledged as the best student in her academics at bachelor degree to which she vanquished by getting into a best college and achieved a 100 per centile. It was her passion to beat the competition of grades and learn the art of making the Pepsi popular worldwide, which she did and Pepsi became the no.1 soft drinks sold worldwide for a decade. Further, the desire of Mr. Bansal whose willingness to be the topper of a class in bachelor and master degree made him to learn the skills of not only establishing a start-up but make it a unicorn within 2 years. He founded the online store which started to count in the most successful business ventures worldwide. Both these instance translate the competition for grades to a learning in business which in turn formed into a success in business. It is significant because, competition made them to learn.
Thirdly, in the field of sports as well where the contribution of education is considered at minimum, competition for high grades made sport person to learn and beat all odds. For instance, the number 1 badminton player of India, i.e. Ms. Sindhu successfully morphed her desire to be at top in academics to be a top in badminton as well because her father made here to understand how competition for high grade would help her learning to strategies and prioritise its opponents. Further, the great grand wrestler of 19th century, i.e. Mr. Undertaker made himself a legend because of his grades. In his autobiography, he stated that his incessant desire for high grades made him so restless to beat all odds and be at the top of his academic which he pursued and exhibited while in ring wrestling to achieve high score for his moves. Through his grades, he stated that he learnt the art of taking the bull by the horns. Both of these cases prove that even in sports, high grades follow the learning. It is important because sports follow the logic of high grades and learning.
Of course, however, some would argue that high grades erodes the learning by citing some research where a student focus on grades but could not learn anything or perhaps the student who follows success but not excellence has faced hard truth of being ignorant. But, in my opinion, it happens rarely and it also contingent on the focus of the student or the manner in which he is learning. The students who face such situation are those not learning but achieving grades only. But the ultimate learning comes from high grades only. In other words, high grades are independent but learning is dependent on high grades. By and large, high grades translate into learning.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
... desire to make an impact in the chosen field, learning and competition are complemen...
Line 5, column 115, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to change'.
Suggestion: to change
...lidate the passion of a person to learn changing business environment. For instance, the...
Line 5, column 322, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
...to which she vanquished by getting into a best college and achieved a 100 per cen...
Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to learn' or 'learn'.
Suggestion: to learn; learn
...mpetition for high grade would help her learning to strategies and prioritise its oppone...
Line 9, column 285, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put before the verb 'happens'.
Suggestion: rarely happens
... being ignorant. But, in my opinion, it happens rarely and it also contingent on the focus of ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, for instance, of course, by and large, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 14.8657303371 209% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 58.6224719101 174% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3737.0 2235.4752809 167% => OK
No of words: 757.0 442.535393258 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93659180978 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.24534393385 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70433032724 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 324.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428005284016 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1143.9 704.065955056 162% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.4938415936 60.3974514979 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.566666667 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2333333333 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242776310406 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810217797134 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0492012879834 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16134859649 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042748617755 0.0667264976115 64% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 100.480337079 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.