Critical judgement of work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who is an expert in that field.
To excel in any profession today, judgements and feedback are paramount to evaluate one’s work and aid in rectifying any areas fallen short on. The prompt recommends critical judgement of work in any given field be done by experts only, as others’ feedback would be of negligible value. In my opinion, I disagree with this suggestion as I feel the judgement made by an individual other than experts are of paragon importance for two reasons.
First of all, the points critiqued upon by the target audience would be more relevant to the aim of one’s work. It may provide feedback from a more distinctive individual to the maker. For instance, if a cartoonist is making an action comic for kids in the age range of 6-10, feedback from these kids on how much they enjoyed or what disinterested them would provide a whole different viewpoint to the cartoonist, which would otherwise not be visualisable to an experienced counterpart. The views provided by the expert might be biassed to the makers and not be suited to the kids, who the comic is being made for. As illustrated in the example above, judgements made by the consumer or audience that is utilising the work of a professional, would open the eyes of one from a while different aspect that the person could never have imagined alone.
Furthermore, in every field, we cannot assume that experts’ opinions are the very best. For instance, a mobile making firm would have the aim of dominating the market. The maximum usage originates from the teenagers, and what attracts them most is innovative and latest technology. Keeping up with the trend is essential for the firm. Experts, who have spent a relatively long time in the industry, would fall less for innovative ideas and would be less heretic. They tend to be stringent to orthodox workings, hence constructing a cogent idea for them might not be in the best interest of the teenager. What may be more relevant and propitious, would be a fledgling in the industry, who has a better outlook in terms of teenage wants, and a favourable chance of bringing industrious ideas to the table. This illustration shows how experts’ opinions are not always the most reliable in every field. Generalising this to various areas would be imprudent and act as a pin to the progress of oneself.
Of course, some may argue that experienced people know which ideas would work for the economy. But isn’t this exactly the reason why we should seek new opinions? “What works once in life, has a lower chance of working out again”. Change is always better and is more suited to the times. Judgements made by consumers of the idea bring a broader scope of thought. Judgements made by dilettantes in the field bring changes and innovative ideas. Over-reliance on the judgements made by experts would hold back the progress of oneself.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, so, while, as to, for instance, i feel, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2362.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87010309278 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75583806246 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503092783505 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6008626237 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4166666667 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2083333333 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.20833333333 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20478116373 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615901453407 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629017721334 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148087643375 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0748296641202 0.0667264976115 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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