A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Till the age of 18, students encounter a range of subjects in school. This aids them in identifying their interests and shapes their future choices. The prompt recommends all students to study the same national curriculum until they reach college. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with this suggestion and argue that students should not be compelled to select the same subjects for the entirety of their school for three reasons.
To begin, it might not be in the best interest of students to pursue all subjects up till the age of 18. This only gives students a broad overview of the subject. For instance, if a student seems to develop an interest in English literature and writing. The student would only be able to gather a fair amount of knowledge pertaining to their interest. They would not be able to get the best idea of the subject before attempting to take a specialized degree for the same. The knowledge they receive would not be vast enough to make this decision. The student would also develop intermediate skills of English literature and writing at a much later age. This would limit the growth in their interest. As illustrated by the example above, restricting the choices of students would hinder them from developing enough skills to decide their specialized skill for the future and delay the reach of their apogee and success. The nation would have a lower proportion of skilled and professional achievers.
Further, even if we say students are sufficiently provided with the knowledge to select their best interest, having a uniform curriculum might add bias to this selection process. For example, if the curriculum of arts subjects in school aren't designed in the best way possible, students would lean towards other professions. Due to the lack of enthusiasm generated by the limited arts subjects with limited scope, students would opt for other professions such as doctors and engineers where the science subjects were designed to instill more interest. This example depicts the bias that could be developed in choosing the future interest for students. This could lead to a nation with a less range of professions, and a scarcity of labour in some professions. This imbalance would perniciously affect the nation's economy and pose a vital dependency on international imports.
In addition to this, students might lose interest in developing themselves in the future as a whole. For instance, even in senior years at school, although a student seemed to like Math earlier, he was only provided with limited scope subjecs pertaining to it. Math only took up 5 percent of his studies. The remaining 95 percent would take up 95 percent of his time and effort. This created a sense of carelessness in the student and he lost interest in studies, even in Math, as a whole. The persistent boredom killed the will of the student. This example illustrates that by restricting the choice of opportunites for students even in their latter years of school, when they have enough knolwedge to know their interest, killed their hope and determination to pursue it. This decision might backfire, and create a large proportion of unemployed and uninterested adults, weakening the economy of the country.
Of course, some argue that my keeping a fixed curriculum, private schools would attract less students with their high fees, which would in turn, publicize public enduation and increase the revenue of the country. However, wouldn't this in turn decrease the revenue of the country? One would lose interest early and not be apt for their profession. One would peak late in their profession of interest. One would tend to not select certain professions. The economy of the country would thus, be weakned, leading to a lower revenue generation. At an adolescent age, students should be provided with options to aid them in selecting their specialized degree for college. Passing mandates only restricts one's true interest and potention and weakens the nation's economy as a whole.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, of course, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3347.0 2235.4752809 150% => OK
No of words: 661.0 442.535393258 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06354009077 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.07049507093 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71906400953 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444780635401 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1014.3 704.065955056 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 36.0 20.2370786517 178% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.9859905155 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9722222222 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3611111111 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167743071378 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515574535469 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080704862408 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12142409186 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0704374440349 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 100.480337079 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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