Educational institutions play a major role in shaping a well-round individual. Hence, it is necessary for the institutions to fulfill its own responsibilities in a sensible way such that the youth and the society is benefited. It is generally thought that educational organizations should make the students realize the fields of study that are unlikely to lead to success and help them to opt for a career, which would fetch him or her much success in future. However, I disagree with this perspective. I feel educational institutes should encourage students to follow their passion and not to be misled just by the success factor.
Firstly, success is a rather subjective topic. Educational institutes cannot really judge which field will be appropriate for which students. Institutes must nurture the passion of the students instead of making them abandon their passion just because the institutes feel that they are irrelevant subjects and cannot help the students to reach apex of the success. What success is to me, it might not be the same for someone else. Monetary success, designations, power are not the only form of success. For example, there are graduates in social science help and contribute to the social well-being of the society and probably the satisfaction what they receive out of contributing to society is equivalent to success for them.
Secondly, there are multifarious subjects these days. Ranging from old and well known subjects like arts, science, geography, history to upcoming subjects like photography, entrepreneurship programs are gaining huge popularity. Most of these subjects might not appeal to many because they are not associated with so-called monetary success, but they contribute equally to society. For example, subjects like history and archaeology are hardly considered interesting fields by the institutes. But, the historical excavations revealing rich and ancient history of various culture is as important as it is fascination for a country.
Thirdly, there are few fields which were considered obsolete and even few institutes considered removing them from curriculum, arts subject being one of them. But recently, we can see the comeback of various such career options, which we never thought of pursuing until few years back. To illustrate, I would cite an example of painting as career. Previously painting was hardly considered as a profession and generally it was pursued as avocation. But presently, we can see a surge of such career options and this proves that people were being misled by the notions of the society all these years and have finally started following their passion.
Nevertheless, educational institutes should focus on economic well-being of the youth of our society as well. And from this perspective, institutes would be right if they dissuade students from pursuing subjects which do not lead to so-called fame, success or money. However, I still feel it should be left to the students to decide what they are really enthusiastic about to learn and take up as a career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a sensible way" with adverb for "sensible"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ons to fulfill its own responsibilities in a sensible way such that the youth and the society is ...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ich would fetch him or her much success in future. However, I disagree with this perspect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28542094456 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94715060648 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 215.323595506 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482546201232 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 797.4 704.065955056 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9347182735 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.25 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2916666667 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280542040784 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704776135611 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753515636742 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158251484618 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739683791884 0.0667264976115 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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