Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
"Give a man a fish, he is fed for a day. Teach a man to fish, he is fed for his life" goes the old saying. Education is one of the most important aspects of a person's life. Whatever field one may choose to work in, be it sports, music,etc, education is vital as it can give a person, an awareness, a perspective which will help in overcoming challenges in their lives. Every person must have a minimum education regardless of their field of study. For this educational institutions are responsible for providing education.Depending upont he faculty, funding, geographical place, different institutions have different fields which they offer. As majority of the population have their jobs,thus their livelihoods on based on their field of study, it is very important for a person to choose a proper field of study as one will be doing the jobs throughou their lives.
Having said that, i completely disagee that the educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.As Henry David Thoreau once said, "You must not just exist, you must live. Existing is as good as being dead."In order for a person to truly enjoy one's life, they must do whatever one is interested in. Even if the said field if there are not many opportunities of finding a steady job, if one is passionate, one can do extraordinary things in the field of their choice."All of us are in the gutters but some of us are looking at the stars."Only people who really love their work, can succeed n the field inspite of several challenges.
For example, it is being said that apart from STEM fields, all the other fields have less opportunities. It is true that the STEM fields might have more funding in the universities because STEM fields generate income to the companies and industries which will encourage them to have collaborations with the universities by financing them in the research which helps the former to make profits. But if a student who is say interested in literature, is forced to become an engineer, he will not have any will to learn more in the field. Atmost he/she will become a mediocre engineer with no outstanding credibilities and this age of cut throat competition, with many engineer who have much better profile than that studet, no one will consider him/her in the job market. Then he/she will be unemployed or worked in a dead end job which neither gives him a decent salary nor satisfaction in life and thus becomes either depressed or engage in some sort of anti socila activities to earn money. Instead if the student is encouraged to learn literature, he/she by their imagination, can succeed in lives by becoming a novelist,or by writing a blog in a newspaper, a script writer or as a freelance writer. Admittedly , the jobs are unstable and few and so alot of comperitition exists for them too.But, it being a student's passion, he/she can put one's best foot forward,and can create wonders.Even if a student doesn't do well in the field, upto their expectation,one willl have the contentment that they have tried their level best and that satisfaction is priceless. For example, Sachin Tendulkar, who is one of the greatest cricketers of all time was failed his sophomore year. He didnt even further pursue his education. But his parents and coach encouraged his passions and with it he succeeded even in sports which has very less success rate. He became known as little master for his mastery in cricket.
Thus every educational institution must encourage a student's passion regardless of the future of the field as only then a person can have contentment in life which is very important for the well being of a person.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... one of the most important aspects of a persons life. Whatever field one may choose to ...
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...y choose to work in, be it sports, music,etc, education is vital as it can give a pe...
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...are responsible for providing education.Depending upont he faculty, funding, geographical...
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...jority of the population have their jobs,thus their livelihoods on based on their fie...
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Suggestion: As
...y in which they are unlikely to succeed.As Henry David Thoreau once said, 'Yo...
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Suggestion: one's
...os;In order for a person to truly enjoy ones life, they must do whatever one is inte...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun opportunities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... STEM fields, all the other fields have less opportunities. It is true that the STEM...
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...his age of cut throat competition, with many engineer who have much better profile than that ...
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...ter or as a freelance writer. Admittedly , the jobs are unstable and few and so a...
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...y , the jobs are unstable and few and so alot of comperitition exists for them to...
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...ot of comperitition exists for them too.But, it being a students passion, he/she ca...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ion exists for them too.But, it being a students passion, he/she can put ones best foot ...
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...n, he/she can put ones best foot forward,and can create wonders.Even if a student do...
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Suggestion: Even
...est foot forward,and can create wonders.Even if a student doesnt do well in the fiel...
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...nd can create wonders.Even if a student doesnt do well in the field, upto their expect...
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...ell in the field, upto their expectation,one willl have the contentment that they ha...
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... time was failed his sophomore year. He didnt even further pursue his education. But ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... master for his mastery in cricket. Thus every educational institution must enco...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ducational institution must encourage a students passion regardless of the future of the...
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Message: Comparison is written "as only 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...less of the future of the field as only then a person can have contentment in life w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, really, so, then, thus, well, apart from, for example, sort of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3107.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 637.0 442.535393258 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87755102041 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02382911018 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9850343098 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 308.0 215.323595506 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483516483516 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 985.5 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.6131650852 60.3974514979 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.227272727 118.986275619 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9545454545 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248551129953 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786551961703 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0920883857441 0.0758088955206 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172385073498 0.150359130593 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374361743174 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.