Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed
Education is a tool that help us to build our characteristics an open our minds. And, an educational institute is a place where our fundamental characteristics were nurtured. Institutes prepare their students to face the world on his or her own terms. So, I greatly disagree with the statement.
First of all, the job of an educational institute is to prepare its pupils to face the world, whatever come at them, truly educate their mind, so that they question everything. Besides, deciding a students career is unfeasible. A students choosing carrier depends on myriad factors, like what is his or her interests and their mental status. Forcing them into a certain path may caused damaged to them and to the field. For example, suppose MBA course is lucrative in recent days and now is is at acme. but, if every students take that course to be successful, that might cause harm to the field and to the students. Students those who were not interested in management course may fail to be succeed and the field may lose its market value, since everyone working on that field.
On the other hand, forcing them in a field may overturn the situation, students can lose their confident. In our modern education system we talked about marks and money. There are many examples of people who choose to follow their dreams rather that follow so called jobs. For example, if someone ask Messi or AR Rahman to be an engineer or doctor where would they have been. There are many sports person who are educate but leave the tradition view and follow their dreams, now they are pinnacle at their carrier. Someone told me if you are doing your dream job or follow you dream that is not a job but you hobby, and you never feel boredom.
Peoples may say that many students unaware of their interests and when a education institute choose their carries they are more likely to succeeded. But I would confront that,if someone unaware of their interest, he or she should consult to their educator and their parents, like what are their favorite subjects and their interests. An institutes job is to direct a student to their life not forcing them to certain path. That might quaver their belief and harm their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 229, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: A student; Students
...ciding a students career is unfeasible. A students choosing carrier depends on myriad fact...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...rse is lucrative in recent days and now is is at acme. but, if every students take th...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...e in recent days and now is is at acme. but, if every students take that course to ...
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Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'asks'.
Suggestion: asks
...so called jobs. For example, if someone ask Messi or AR Rahman to be an engineer or...
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Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...re would they have been. There are many sports person who are educate but leave the tr...
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Line 3, column 406, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...have been. There are many sports person who are educate but leave the tradition view an...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'educated'.
Suggestion: educated
...n. There are many sports person who are educate but leave the tradition view and follow...
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Line 4, column 72, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nts unaware of their interests and when a education institute choose their carrie...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , if
... to succeeded. But I would confront that,if someone unaware of their interest, he o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, may, so, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 384.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73177083333 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47114286065 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515625 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5601668692 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5238095238 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170998097062 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574622079636 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428593214886 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112102225278 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355283954747 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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